#1
okay, ya i know there's probably not gonna be enough here to even crit, but please try anyway. i was writting this last night and then i just couldn't write anymore so i need a little help. any suggestions for what could come next? thanks so much! crit 4 crit!

Verse 1
You'll never have to cross the street alone
or fake another gorgeous smile
you won't have to wait by yourself
or drive another solo mile
just grabe my hand and hold it tight
you know i won't ever let it go
i'm here to stay, don't walk away
'cause there's something you must know

chorus
never again will you be on your own

and this is where the block came in...lol...thanks again! if i come up with any more, i'll be sure to add it!
If every simple song i wrote
would take your breath away
i'd write it all
#2
this is good i like the flow too, umm short chorus lol im not sure if u wanted to add to the chorus. but i'll try to help

chorus
never again will you be on your own
as long as you have me to hold.
we can just walk along the shore
and never give a care about the rest of the world

idk if that helps, hope it does


crit mine?
the first one in my sig
#3
oh wow, i really like that! thanks so much, ill crit yours when i get a chance.
If every simple song i wrote
would take your breath away
i'd write it all