#1
It’s been a Long October of dishonesty and vice,
Every single smile coming at a steeper, darker, price.
Forget and arm and a leg, this time it costs your soul
Leave you pale, shaken, hollow, oh so unwhole.

It’s been a Long October in the city of the damned,
All the psychos and the killers taking children by the hand.
It will always be this way, no answer will be found,
Until you stand upon your own two feet, pick yourself up off the ground...

And face what you fear the most,
Your own worst horror.
Stand in front of those who chose,
To give in to their terror.
But it only takes one, to open up the gates
To finally show the sun, give the light back to this place..

It’s been a Long October of evil and dispare,
The brave pay the price for a criminals business affair.
The evil take the pure and steal their youth away,
The old walk in, but it’s the young who have to pay.

It’s been a Long October of diabolical deceit,
Paying off the horrid, bringing the innocent to their knees.
There are those more to blame, and just those who played their part,
And those of us who are breaking strings for the sake of broken hearts.

To bring a little grace back,
Heal the darkened scars.
Give the people back their torch,
To compare with the brightest of stars.
But it only takes one, to open up the gates,
To finally show the sun, give the light back to this place.

It’s been a Long October but October’s almost past,
Maybe October next year will be better than the last.
It’s been a Long October put the people have made their choice,
Some day soon they will stand and say in one voice.
“You’ve stolen Long October, but now all that is through,
You’ve held Long October long enough, now we’re taking it from you.”
It's been a long October in the City of the Damned
All the psychos and the killers take the children by their hands....
#2
Please crit.
Any criticism or possible changes are appreciated.
Inspired by V for Vendetta and the road our country is headed down right now, and how things will never change unless someone take the initiative.
Thanks.
It's been a long October in the City of the Damned
All the psychos and the killers take the children by their hands....
#4
Dude! No bumping. If you want crits, crit some yourself. *reported*.

I can't believe you're impatient after 5 minutes. The average crit takes at least 15 minutes.

Read em rulez!
#5
Hmm I never thought about that but you're right, def. need to change some words around.
It's been a long October in the City of the Damned
All the psychos and the killers take the children by their hands....
#6
dude confusius chill the **** out I posted it as a comment 'cause I forgot to put in the original thread.
It's been a long October in the City of the Damned
All the psychos and the killers take the children by their hands....