#1
The Only Thing Darker Than Pitch Black Itself Is The Evil That The Moon Shines Down
New peice just wrote it


Moonlight's pouring down,
Raining over sadness
Drifting over happy-ness,
and losing all that's found
The moonlight is complexing,
And it never goes away
Bringing forth a darkness,
Telling me stay

But I wont listen

As your walking home in the darkness,
remember what I said
That moonlight can entance you,
And put darkness in your head
It can make you do some things,
That you never would have done
If I hadn't left you,
For a another one

But I Did

The Moonlight,
Blinking through the clouds at us is so bright
But we will not live happily,
And all of this ends. Tonight

Sirens wake me the next morning,
I fear for what they say you've done
It's all my fault for leaving you,
You thought I was your only one
Now she's gone and so are you,
I screwed my life but didn't mean to
Selfishness has won its game,
And I live in total shame

The moonlight,
Glaring with its dissapointment,
Decieving what is really there
Now i sit here all alone,
And think of what the moonlight shone
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Last edited by Fallen_Misery at Jun 30, 2007,
#2
I like it. Most the last verse.
I think that theres some clichés like. Moonlight shining down on you and me. But it's hard to
write a song thats original nowadays. Keep up the good work. It's there. Just grab it
#3
i was thinking the same thing, that i was a little plain. I decided to change some of things in there and I really think it made it alot better...thanks for the crit
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#4
Sirens wake me the next morning,
I fear for what they say you've done
It's all my fault for leaving you,
You thought I was your only one
Now she's gone and so are you,
I screwed my life but didn't mean to
Selfishness has won its game,
And I live in total shame

this part makes me kinda hawt in the pants...

But quite honestly the whole thing is good. It really has a constant theme that gave me an emotion that I can't quite put my finger on.

But all in all definetely a really good piece
#5
haha that an interesting way to put things...

thanks for the crit
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#6
Yeah I have a habit of doing that... but I can't help but tell you the truth.

That song aroused me.
#7
thats good...now i just need to put some music to it...I just started learning my guitar so it might take awhile but if I ever get it done ill send you it and you can do whatever you want with it lol
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#9
i had to look that word up and when I did it made me laugh haha. do whatever you want! lol...hmmm maybe this can work with some chicks I know...*daydreams*.....nahhh
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#10
duuude you sigged me, this makes me even more hawt for you.

Wait did I say that aloud? *covers lips*
#11
Your title made it sound like a Falloutboy song lol. I liked it by the way.
Baby, can you dig your man?
He's a righteous man,
Baby, can you dig your man?

- Larry Underwood
#12
haha the original title was even longer but it wouldnt fit in the title box so i changed it....thanks

and soup ya i sigged you that was ****in hilarious....just stay away from me
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#13
i'm sorry i was in lack of sleep deleriums last night lol

But however this song really is a great song
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