#2
pretty sweet man. i really like it.
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#3
this is pretty good. there were nice rhymes there that weren't grade school style rhymes.
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#4
Very nice! I like it a lot, You rhyme words pretty well in this. Just make sure that you don't force it. But that is of course, the way it was intended to be written. But on a lighter note. I think it was really good. Do you have any more pieces? Cause I would like to read more. Or just let me know when you post more. The best part I would have to say about this is that its pretty much flawless. I cant really pick out anything wrong, maybe cause theres nothing =P. Well anyways good work! If you get the time check out my song. It's in my signature but sometimes that link does not work. So if not here it is =P. https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=615191
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