pretty sweet man. i really like it.
Nerdo-sez-bo wrote:

Bon Jovi can just **** off really.

Life is one big question when your starin at the clock
And the answers always waiting at the liquor store, 40 oz to Freedom
this is pretty good. there were nice rhymes there that weren't grade school style rhymes.
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Very nice! I like it a lot, You rhyme words pretty well in this. Just make sure that you don't force it. But that is of course, the way it was intended to be written. But on a lighter note. I think it was really good. Do you have any more pieces? Cause I would like to read more. Or just let me know when you post more. The best part I would have to say about this is that its pretty much flawless. I cant really pick out anything wrong, maybe cause theres nothing =P. Well anyways good work! If you get the time check out my song. It's in my signature but sometimes that link does not work. So if not here it is =P. https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=615191
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Ibanez Gax 70 Gio electric guitar cherry red color
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