#1
Ok, this is the first song I've posted on UG. C4C

If I could give you anything
I'd give you all that you could dream
And I'd try to find a way for you to fly

The beauty in your eyes provide
The joy thats in my life and I'm
In love with you and everything you do
Because I was made for you


(Chorus)

I wanna love you for all time
I'll be true and treat you right
I'll keep you held deep inside my soul
This I hope you know


I never thought that I could find
A special love that I'd call mine
Until you came and picked me up that day

But through the good times and the bad
We made it through and I'm so glad
Just tell me that you love me too
Because I was made for you
Songs
Our Song

Quote by archangels666

YOU MOTHER GET UP, come on get DOWN WITH THE BUTTSECKS!
YOU FUCKER GET UP, come on get DOWN WITH THE BUTTSECKS!
BUTTSECKS IS THE GIFT THAT HAS BEEN GIVEN TO ME!


#3
Thank you, The title also refers to the fact that a good friend and I wrote the song and couldnt think of anything better to call it
Songs
Our Song

Quote by archangels666

YOU MOTHER GET UP, come on get DOWN WITH THE BUTTSECKS!
YOU FUCKER GET UP, come on get DOWN WITH THE BUTTSECKS!
BUTTSECKS IS THE GIFT THAT HAS BEEN GIVEN TO ME!


#4
If I could give you anything
I'd give you all that you could dream
And I'd try to find a way for you to fly
I like this intro. Very touching way to open the piece with.

The beauty in your eyes provide
The joy thats in my life and I'm
In love with you and everything you do
Because I was made for you
This part seems a bit sketchy, only because the rhyme scheme is kinda repetitive. But it's quite a meaningful stanzzizle.

(Chorus)

I wanna love you for all time
I'll be true and treat you right
I'll keep you held deep inside my soul
This I hope you know
Nice little chorus. I would suggest maybe taking out the 'I'll' in the third line because of the syllable count.

I never thought that I could find
A special love that I'd call mine
Until you came and picked me up that day
This is less impactful as a writers point of view, but it definitely gets more into the storyline os the song.

But through the good times and the bad
We made it through and I'm so glad
Just tell me that you love me too
Because I was made for you
I would take out 'glad'. For me it is a bit forced, my only suggestion would be to kill the rhyme scheme because in the similar stanza above it does not have a rhyme in the first two lines. But I love how you end it the same way you ended the one before.

All in all a kick ass song. Very well written I'd say. Only a few minor flaws here and there, but nothing big.
Keep up the great work.
Crit one of mine if you get the chance? In the sig.

#5
I think a lot of it is overused in song writing. What I mean I guess is that I think you could find more meaningful and creative comparisons and words to use in the piece. It's important to be creative when writing about common topics like this one, because a lot has already been said. But if you can re-work it a little, it has the potential to be a great piece. Good job.

Amanda is the latest piece I have, it's in my sig if you'd like to take a look.
Drop another coin in the slot, and I will tell you more...
#6
If I could give you anything
I'd give you all that you could dream
And I'd try to find a way for you to fly

A good opening, starts off with strong feelings

The beauty in your eyes provide
The joy thats in my life and I'm
In love with you and everything you do
Because I was made for you

I like how the lines were split here, makes it flow nicely

(Chorus)

I wanna love you for all time
I'll be true and treat you right
I'll keep you held deep inside my soul
This I hope you know

pretty good, third line's a little long, maybe take out i'll

I never thought that I could find
A special love that I'd call mine
Until you came and picked me up that day

im not as crazy about this little staza here, third line feels a little long and forced, but still ok

But through the good times and the bad
We made it through and I'm so glad
Just tell me that you love me too
Because I was made for you

Nice simple way to close out


Overall, a good piece, just clean it up a little bit, and it will be even better
#8
pretty nice little song written i guess for a special someone.Anyway when you named it our song i mean i could just imagine a bf/gf turning channels on a radio and boom theres this "they say hey,its our song" ,lol yea and thats the name of it pretty cool tho.Let me know if you record this,this would be quite a good listen.https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=9861191#post9861191