#1
I started this song after watching the Argentina-USA Copa America soccer game, because it just seems like it would be an awesome place to visit, and I wrote the entire second verse based around the main character of Munich.

Cities
Breaking into and breaking out of
So many complications
So much that could go wrong
I have no regrets
I just wish that they were here to see this
To watch this place burn to the ground

And I’m not quite sure, about anything
And I’m holding the door, and letting cold air in
Letting cold air in

My life
Even mixture of steel and wine
Your heart
Open door to love and sacrifice
This mess
We really got ourselves into trouble this time
I’ll lend an ear
Hopefully, it doesn’t drown out your voice

And I’m not quite sure about anything
And I’m holding the door with no one walking in
These days are the best of my life, but I don’t know where to begin

And I wish, they were here to see this, that they were to see this
I wish, that they were here to see this, that they were here to see this


I have a link to my MySpace in my sig which has an actual recording of the song (with the original lyrics, I changed them because I'm actually recording this song, the other two on the MySpace, the song I posted the other day and another one with my friend and putting it on CD), so you can have audio company (I know my voice isn't the greatest in the world , sorry if it breaks your eardrums).

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lost city radio. (acoustic)

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Substance and Color
#3
Quote by mcflying_high
i liked that. it was really different.

My life
Even mixture of steel and wine
Your heart
Open door to love and sacrifice

very good.


thanks, dude. that's the type of thing I'm going for, haha. most acoustic stuff around here is either Jack Johnson stuff or side projects, so I'm trying to keep it somewhat fresh even though I'm not great at technical stuff like solos or scales.
Guitars - Epiphone Les Paul Standard (Cherry Sunburst)/Alvarez Acoustic/Electric cutaway
Amp - Vox Valvetronix AD30VT 30W
Effects - Boss OS2/Boss DD6 Digital Delay/Digitech RP50

lost city radio. (acoustic)

Songs
Substance and Color
#5
Loved everything except the last two lines of the second verse. Those two lines didn't make a lot of sense. There's not really anything to criticize so I'll leave it at that rather than going on about how great it was.

I liked the recording too, it fits the song. Bonus points for Yankee Hotel Foxtrot and In The Aeroplane Over The Sea, those two are also in my top 10.
#6
Quote by bananaboy
Loved everything except the last two lines of the second verse. Those two lines didn't make a lot of sense. There's not really anything to criticize so I'll leave it at that rather than going on about how great it was.

I liked the recording too, it fits the song. Bonus points for Yankee Hotel Foxtrot and In The Aeroplane Over The Sea, those two are also in my top 10.


Wow, thanks man. I really appreciate that.

Yeah, I'm thinking about changing those last two lines to "I just wish they were here to see this".

Sapphire - The recording is on the myspace. It's not too great, but it's something.
Guitars - Epiphone Les Paul Standard (Cherry Sunburst)/Alvarez Acoustic/Electric cutaway
Amp - Vox Valvetronix AD30VT 30W
Effects - Boss OS2/Boss DD6 Digital Delay/Digitech RP50

lost city radio. (acoustic)

Songs
Substance and Color
#8
very awesome. kinda wish i had wrote it. the first verse was very amazing. i also liked the use of metaphors, then the jump to realism.

"Open door to love and sacrifice
This mess
We really got ourselves into trouble this time
I’ll lend an ear
Hopefully, it doesn’t drown out your voice"

awesome and totally unique. great job dude. i don't think i would change anything.
#9
Cities
Breaking into and breaking out of
So many complications
So much that could go wrong
I have no regrets
I just wish that they were here to see this
To watch this place burn to the ground

Pretty good start. But, it isn't really the sort of subject that particularly interests me.

And I’m not quite sure, about anything
And I’m holding the door, and letting cold air in
Letting cold air in

How does this relate to burning a city down? I think I like it though...

My life
Even mixture of steel and wine
Your heart
Open door to love and sacrifice
This mess
We really got ourselves into trouble this time
I’ll lend an ear
Hopefully, it doesn’t drown out your voice

Now this is better. Nothing wrong here.

And I’m not quite sure about anything
And I’m holding the door with no one walking in
These days are the best of my life, but I don’t know where to begin

I don't like this. Cliche, and boring as far as I see.

And I wish, they were here to see this, that they were to see this
I wish, that they were here to see this, that they were here to see this

Not the strongest ending, but not the worst.

This is a pretty good piece. There are some parts that I really like, but others that just seem to be thrown in there as filler.

I know you have critted one of mine, but as a favour, could you crit my other? I'll get the next one you do as well.
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#10
Cities
Breaking into and breaking out of
So many complications
So much that could go wrong
I have no regrets
I just wish that they were here to see this
To watch this place burn to the ground

And I’m not quite sure, about anything
And I’m holding the door, and letting cold air in
Letting cold air in

My life
Even mixture of steel and wine
Your heart
Open door to love and sacrifice
This mess
We really got ourselves into trouble this time
I’ll lend an ear
Hopefully, it doesn’t drown out your voice
I like the first four lines, but the last part doesn't really make any sense to me.

And I’m not quite sure about anything
And I’m holding the door with no one walking in
These days are the best of my life, but I don’t know where to begin

And I wish, they were here to see this, that they were to see this
I wish, that they were here to see this, that they were here to see this

Mostly, I really like it. Keep up the good work, man. My link's in my sig.

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