#1
I am still working on this, I just made it to the chorus and now I kinda hit a dead zone, but any crit is apreciated.

I will be 80 and on my deathbed
you will be 81 and still be dancing
With your innocence result of a childhood pure

Do you ever feel like your fading away?
Monotomy makes the nights seem shorter...
I'm so lonely I just want someone to hold.

Living my cardboard life in a mystery
Just numb I feel nothing but want
And I just wish thst I was free

*CHORUS*
Beauty is
Only soul deep
But would you sin
to get off cheap?
#2
Repost this with a proper title, and i'll crit it.

*reported*
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