#1
Your beutiful eyes
are my wishing well
millions of coins spent
to me so meaningful,

not a dime I wouldnt spend
in that wishing well
for just one wish
for lifes one miracle.

that somone to be with,
never to be alone.
is that somone you,
as I wait for fate to unfold.

each wish is the same
never to change
until that one day
my wish is containded.

your eyes so beautiful,
that well so cold
and my one wish
which remains to unfold.

I then close my eyes
and nothing to say
know blind to my well
I will pray.

I open my eyes
to see yours closed too
then you look up
and my wish has come true.
#2
Your beautiful eyes
are my wishing well
millions of coins spent
to me so meaningful,

This would be a lot more effective if it was;

Your beautiful eyes
are my wishing well,
and the millions of coins
I've spent are little sacrifice

This gives the imression that you don't care how much money you spend on the person.


not a dime I wouldnt spend
in that wishing well
for just one wish
for lifes one miracle.

Last line seems a bit off to me, a bit cliche.

that somone to be with,
never to be alone.
is that somone you,
as I wait for fate to unfold.

I don't like this. Really doesn't add much. I would leave this out, because the previous verse flows into the next verse quite nicely anyway.

each wish is the same
never to change
until that one day
my wish is containded.

You contradict yourself here. Why would the wish never change if it comes true, considering there is no need to have a wish since it would have been granted? Contained is the wrong word here, it means to keep in, or in this context, away. You need a word which implies it has been granted.

your eyes so beautiful,
that well so cold
and my one wish
which remains to unfold.

You could even make this verse into where you say that you don't have the guts to tell your wish [which is obviously for the girl to love you] to the girl. Just change it to;

your eyes so beautiful,
that well so cold,
and my one wish
which remains untold.



I then close my eyes
and nothing to say
know blind to my well
I will pray.

This makes little to no sense. Needs a lot of work.

I open my eyes
to see yours closed too
then you look up
and my wish has come true.

I would leave out the 'and' in the last line



Good potential, just needs a bit of work. Nice job.
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