#1
Haven't posted a song on here in years, but here is a power ballad that I recently wrote: (Don't be too harse with crits)


ALL OF MY HEART
written by Andrew Maletta (ACMII)


I didn't know that I could feel like this.
There's never been a girl quite like you.
If you take my hand, you will hold my heart.
And every beat will be for you.

I will
Love you with all of my heart
I will give you all of my soul.
I can't imagine ever being apart.
Cause I will love you,
With all of my heart.

-Guitar Solo 1-

I didn't think I'd ever feel like this.
But there's no one quite like you.
If I give you my hand, will you take my heart?
It will beat for you, (it'll beat for you!)

I will
Love you with all of my heart
I will give you all of my soul.
I can't imagine ever being apart.
Cause I will love you,
With all of my heart.

-Guitar Solo 1-
-Guitar Solo 2-

I will love you will all my heart,
And every beat will be for you.
Will you take my heart?
Will you take my heart,
It'll beat for you...

I will
Love you with all of my heart.
I wanna give you all of my soul.
Don't think we're ever gonna be apart.
Cause I will love you,
With all of my heart.
aCm2
#2
I can see what you're trying to do with this one but it sounded a bit repetative to me. Perhaps if your condense what you've got down a bit and add a little something that still says what your feeling but in a different way rather than using the same words all the way through just to give it a bit of variety.
Monkie - Mod-Punk-Indie

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