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#1
Ok... my characters are very detailed and I was just wondering what the UG community thought of them. I'm happy to hear you're opinion.

Art Fletcher- He is a nice person and likes to keep everybody around him happy. That doesn't necessarily mean he is very happy though. He is a very loyal friend and works in the small town of Armar. He works at his fathers bowling alley.

Shayne Laiten- Shayne is a crude person that has a bad mouth and loves to say f*ck a lot. He is still a loyal friend though most of the time and can prove to be rather brave in situations of need. He is a hunter and loves to shoot stuff.

Angela Rose- Angela Rose is one of the prettiest s in the academy. She graduated from trade school at the top of her class and was immediately accepted into the academy. she is a very bright person who will always find the good in things. She tries her hardest to succeed as much as she can at everything she does. Her eyes are beautiful.

So what does UG think of my three main characters?
#3
What are these characters to?
If you can bear to hear the truth you've spoken
Twisted by knaves to make a trap for fools,
Or watch the things you gave your life to, broken,
And stoop and build 'em up with worn-out tools
#5
...Are they for a book or something?

Either way, you need a dumbshi character. Every good book/movie/show has some dumbass character that fucks everything up.
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I'm debating if this is spam or not.


how is this spam?!

the grammar thread maybe, but certainly not this.
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how is this spam?!

the grammar thread maybe, but certainly not this.


Well you didn't specify to what they were used for, and without that, it was quite random.
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#9
+ 5 for adding a stupid character
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#10
a b00k?


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#11
this is the part you forgot.

Art Fletcher- He is a nice person and likes to keep everybody around him happy. That doesn't necessarily mean he is very happy though. He acts this way, because his father touched him while he was a child and he never fully got over it. He is a very loyal friend and works in the small town of Armar. He works at his fathers bowling alley.

Shayne Laiten- Shayne is a crude person that has a bad mouth and loves to say f*ck a lot. He is still a loyal friend though most of the time and can prove to be rather brave in situations of need. But in all reality, he isn't that brave or tough at all. He just acts big, because he has a small penis. He is a hunter and loves to shoot stuff.

Angela Rose- Angela Rose is one of the prettiest s in the academy. She graduated from trade school at the top of her class and was immediately accepted into the academy. she is a very bright person who will always find the good in things. She tries her hardest to succeed as much as she can at everything she does. Her eyes are beautiful. She is a whore.
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this is the part you forgot.

Art Fletcher- He is a nice person and likes to keep everybody around him happy. That doesn't necessarily mean he is very happy though. He acts this way, because his father touched him while he was a child and he never fully got over it. He is a very loyal friend and works in the small town of Armar. He works at his fathers bowling alley.

Shayne Laiten- Shayne is a crude person that has a bad mouth and loves to say f*ck a lot. He is still a loyal friend though most of the time and can prove to be rather brave in situations of need. But in all reality, he isn't that brave or tough at all. He just acts big, because he has a small penis. He is a hunter and loves to shoot stuff.

Angela Rose- Angela Rose is one of the prettiest s in the academy. She graduated from trade school at the top of her class and was immediately accepted into the academy. she is a very bright person who will always find the good in things. She tries her hardest to succeed as much as she can at everything she does. Her eyes are beautiful. She is a whore.

That gave them a nice touch I think.
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this is the part you forgot.

Art Fletcher- He is a nice person and likes to keep everybody around him happy. That doesn't necessarily mean he is very happy though. He acts this way, because his father touched him while he was a child and he never fully got over it. He is a very loyal friend and works in the small town of Armar. He works at his fathers bowling alley.

Shayne Laiten- Shayne is a crude person that has a bad mouth and loves to say f*ck a lot. He is still a loyal friend though most of the time and can prove to be rather brave in situations of need. But in all reality, he isn't that brave or tough at all. He just acts big, because he has a small penis. He is a hunter and loves to shoot stuff.

Angela Rose- Angela Rose is one of the prettiest s in the academy. She graduated from trade school at the top of her class and was immediately accepted into the academy. she is a very bright person who will always find the good in things. She tries her hardest to succeed as much as she can at everything she does. Her eyes are beautiful. She is a whore.


haha
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this is the part you forgot.

Art Fletcher- He is a nice person and likes to keep everybody around him happy. That doesn't necessarily mean he is very happy though. He acts this way, because his father touched him while he was a child and he never fully got over it. He is a very loyal friend and works in the small town of Armar. He works at his fathers bowling alley.

Shayne Laiten- Shayne is a crude person that has a bad mouth and loves to say f*ck a lot. He is still a loyal friend though most of the time and can prove to be rather brave in situations of need. But in all reality, he isn't that brave or tough at all. He just acts big, because he has a small penis. He is a hunter and loves to shoot stuff.

Angela Rose- Angela Rose is one of the prettiest s in the academy. She graduated from trade school at the top of her class and was immediately accepted into the academy. she is a very bright person who will always find the good in things. She tries her hardest to succeed as much as she can at everything she does. Her eyes are beautiful. She is a whore.


It's always good to have major character flaws :P
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LMAO to the character tune ups lol

Iamafunguy is becoming more of a fun guy every second!
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#17
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Iamafunguy is becoming more of a fun guy every second!


I try :P
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I try :P

Well keep it up. And no more spam threads like that grammar one .
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Well keep it up. And no more spam threads like that grammar one .


PLEASE.
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^ +1


I think i should be thrown in your sig along with Anarion614 but replace the with +1
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#22
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I think i should be thrown in your sig along with Anarion614 but replace the with +1

Well if that happens, then I should get thrown in there too. Actually I don't care.
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Well if that happens, then I should get thrown in there too. Actually I don't care.


Lol, it's because we've "+1"'ed each other like, 30 times tonight
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#27
I'm throwing both you guys in my sig with a +1.
It's GANDHI not GHANDI

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#28
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I'm throwing both you guys in my sig with a +1.


now I've got to make space.

Since we're miserably off-topic, what are those characters for??
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#29
Ok for real Funguy, here is an on topic reply.

The characters are good, but you're lacking things to make me visualize them. Give bodily descriptions, like how they look, their build, facial hair (if any), what clothes they wear, their personal backgrounds, relationships, recent problems, etc.

It would help, and I know if you're using these characters in a book those details would be filled in throughout the story, but if you're just telling us the characters then I think those should be there to help us visualize them, make us feel what they're going through or what they're feeling.
#31
Whatever this is, it fails.
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#32
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Whatever this is, it fails.

You know a thread is done for when kittens can't even save it. Originally I thought the characters would be good for a book. Then, Kankuro suggested an RPG and all I have to say to that is...

+1
It's GANDHI not GHANDI

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#33
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Whatever this is, it fails.



I beg to differ.
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#34
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I beg to differ.



The kittens have spoken!!!
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#36
^ Dude I'm a Transformer *points to sig*. I'll crush those cute, little, balls of fuzz.
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^ Dude I'm a Transformer *points to sig*. I'll crush those cute, little, balls of fuzz.


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#39
^ Sweet! I've always wanted to see Balrog with an AK-47.
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#40
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^ Sweet! I've always wanted to see Balrog with an AK-47.


yep and two rocket launchers on each shoulder.

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Aragon- duel wielding pistols
gimli- shotgun
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