#1
ok first off, i personally think that there are some changes that need to be made to this song. constructive criticism is welcome but i dont want any crap talk due to the fact that this is a touchy subhject with me. so, here we go.


Verse 1
Here I am
stuck in this cell
it seems there's no way out
no matter what i do
theres no respect from you
are you ever satisfied?

Chorus
Why does this place feel like hell
please let this be a dream
ill wake up within the hour
to see the good in everything
yet there's no way out
I've tried so hard
to find what you desire
Nothing's ever good enough
just lay me down to die.

Verse 2
Here I am
the same old sh--
is happening everyday
I can't keep up
so i tell my mind
just one more time, just one more day.

Chorus
Why does this place feel like hell
please let this be a dream
I'll wake up within the hour
to see the good in everything
Yet there's no way out
and I'm still trying hard
to find what you desire
time is running out
my mind is starting to collapse

Verse 3
Here I am
writing these words
of what happens everyday
the pressure of this
is caving my lungs
and now the time is up

Chorus
Why does this place feel like hell
please let this be a dream
I'll wake up within the hour
to see the good in everything
yet there's no way out
and I'm done trying hard
to find what you desire
the weight is too much
and I'm lifting it up
with one metal shot


Once again, this is a touchy subject with me, but im all ears to constructive criticism and a new title if needed.
thanks again