#1
this is the first song I wrote
the solo needs a lot of work just like the rhythem part under it.
Please share your thoughts and suggestions.
Attachments:
Song 1.zip
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Epiphone SG Special Custom
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#2
it's pretty nice...

i have problem with bars 1, 5, 7-i mean all the clean bars with the D chord...
try changing those bars.
it is also too repetitive in my opinion, try adding drums and bass, that way it would be cool.
the solo can be improved, try to make it more interesting, maybe faster.

even thou it's not my kind of music, i kinda like it...

overall 7.5/10.
crit my songs, (PLZ):
[thread="610914"]Num.2[/thread]
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[thread="620776"]Num.9[/thread]
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[thread="630441"]Num.11[/thread]
[thread="637838"]Num.12[/thread]
[thread="638436"]Num.13[/thread]
[thread="639309"]Num.14(UnFinshed)[/thread]
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[thread="642193"]Num.17[/thread]
[thread="643556"]Num.18[/thread]
[thread="651276"]Num.19[/thread]
[thread="660867"]Out Of The Darkness[/thread]
[thread="661588"]Begining[/thread]
#3
any suggestions in how to change the solo and the bars with clean D? I'm not a great solo writer so I need all the help I can get
Fender Squier Strat
Epiphone SG Special Custom
Peavy Bandit 65
#4
it depenes, do you want me to overwrite it?
crit my songs, (PLZ):
[thread="610914"]Num.2[/thread]
[thread="610914"]Num.3[/thread]
[thread="610914"]Num.4[/thread]
[thread="620776"]Num.9[/thread]
[thread="620776"]Num.10[/thread]
[thread="630441"]Num.11[/thread]
[thread="637838"]Num.12[/thread]
[thread="638436"]Num.13[/thread]
[thread="639309"]Num.14(UnFinshed)[/thread]
[thread="638439"]Num.15(UnFinshed)[/thread]
[thread="642193"]Num.17[/thread]
[thread="643556"]Num.18[/thread]
[thread="651276"]Num.19[/thread]
[thread="660867"]Out Of The Darkness[/thread]
[thread="661588"]Begining[/thread]
#5
yes it would be interesting to see what you can do with it.
Fender Squier Strat
Epiphone SG Special Custom
Peavy Bandit 65
#6
im done.
heres what i made.
after re-hearing the song, i dont think the solos are too bad,
so, i didnt change them.
Attachments:
Song 1-Changed.zip
crit my songs, (PLZ):
[thread="610914"]Num.2[/thread]
[thread="610914"]Num.3[/thread]
[thread="610914"]Num.4[/thread]
[thread="620776"]Num.9[/thread]
[thread="620776"]Num.10[/thread]
[thread="630441"]Num.11[/thread]
[thread="637838"]Num.12[/thread]
[thread="638436"]Num.13[/thread]
[thread="639309"]Num.14(UnFinshed)[/thread]
[thread="638439"]Num.15(UnFinshed)[/thread]
[thread="642193"]Num.17[/thread]
[thread="643556"]Num.18[/thread]
[thread="651276"]Num.19[/thread]
[thread="660867"]Out Of The Darkness[/thread]
[thread="661588"]Begining[/thread]
#7
thanks very much it sounds a lot better now! I especially like the drum you made. It fits perfectly in the song
Fender Squier Strat
Epiphone SG Special Custom
Peavy Bandit 65
#8
thanks,
let me know if u need anything else.
crit my songs, (PLZ):
[thread="610914"]Num.2[/thread]
[thread="610914"]Num.3[/thread]
[thread="610914"]Num.4[/thread]
[thread="620776"]Num.9[/thread]
[thread="620776"]Num.10[/thread]
[thread="630441"]Num.11[/thread]
[thread="637838"]Num.12[/thread]
[thread="638436"]Num.13[/thread]
[thread="639309"]Num.14(UnFinshed)[/thread]
[thread="638439"]Num.15(UnFinshed)[/thread]
[thread="642193"]Num.17[/thread]
[thread="643556"]Num.18[/thread]
[thread="651276"]Num.19[/thread]
[thread="660867"]Out Of The Darkness[/thread]
[thread="661588"]Begining[/thread]