#1
Wrote it for my girlfriend for our 7 month, she loved it but of course she was gonna say she did....

it's the first full song i've ever written so any feedback positive or negative (constructive) is welcomed


A warm summer night when we first met
A cold winter night when we first kissed
Two special nights I’ll never ever forget
Oh you

Oh you, ohh you
It’s everything you say
And everything you do
I, I miss you

Now its seven months we’ve been together
And it’s still you
Still you, who gets me through the day,
Still you, I pour my heart into
Still you, oh you

Oh you, ohh you
It’s everything you say
And everything you do
I, I love you

Ohh, oh you
It’s everything you say
And everything you do
Please stay for the rest
The rest of my days
Oh you

Seven months and we’re so young
Seven months so far apart
A long life ahead of us, don’t worry,
Love, this is just the start

Oh you, ohh you
It’s everything you say
And everything you do
An entire song, just for you

Ohh you, oh you (repeat x4)
#2
This is a fairly good piece of work. The only complaint I hae is that it is very repetative. Could you please crit mine? WHen Your Veins Stop Cold.