#1
Verse 1
Tonight is for dreaming things that make us forget
Fall asleep at the wheel and we're flirting with death
With my heart in your hands and your hands on the wheel
You're f---ing driving me crazy but I love how it feels.

Verse 2
If you're ready to go, we've got no trail to erase
We'll burn rubber for hours, if you know what I mean
In a shark on a mission and the mission is clear
To leave the past in the dust and get the hell out of here.
I'm not one of those boys that's just here for the ride
if you're sick of the steering then we'll switch and I'll drive
We'll speed through the places where nobody will know
On our way to the city where the sun burns slow.

Chorus
We've only got a couple hours to live like this
Get in the car, and the life that we love will begin.
The sun is setting and I'm sick of letting it go down
Come with me, baby, and we'll drive this bastard into the ground.

Verse 3
One final drink and then we'll be on our way.
Raise a toast to the lovers who never could stay
If you come with me now, I'll be with you for life
All alone in the desert but I'm feeling all right
We've got nothing to go out to, I don't know if it's there.
Two kids with empty lungs, screaming, crying for air.
So we don't have a thing, we'll just go it alone
Get your skates on, babe, 'cause it's time for the show and...

Chorus
We've only got a couple hours to live like this
Get in the car, and the life that we love will begin.
The sun is setting and I'm sick of letting it go down
Come with me, baby, and we'll drive this bastard into the ground.
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The way I've recorded it is that it fades away with the chorus repeated over and over and I fade in "Get your skates on, babe / Get your skates on" repeated under the chorus. Sounds not too bad. Not sure why I'm letting you know that, other than I guess, to show the ending is less abrupt than the lyrics themselves suggest.

Cheers,
- PunkFish.
#2
Wow that was awesome. I loved those first two verses two much for words. My favorite line in the third line from the first verse

With my heart in your hands and your hands on the wheel

It blew me away. I am not sure what kinda of genre it is but this is a great song, I can hear it in my head. Definitely one of the best I've read recently.

BTW thanks for the crit of mine. You were not too far off with the Taxi Driver parrell.
#3
****ing awesome. Great rhythm, great rhyming, and great lyrics. I wish I could write like you haha.

Thanks for the crit on my half-ass first song.
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#4
Man, love the lyrics, they flow so well. But, I've got to admit, I had to read this mostly because the title sounded so badass, good thing I did read it though because this song is great, and as someone else said, I wish I could write like that man.

Crit mine? Thanks
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#5
I'm really into punk and REALLY INTO RANCID and this song is really punk great job!! crit mine Something to believe
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#6
A+. Well done, nice rhythm.
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#7
First of all thanks for the crit. I appreciate it. The first verse really got me into the piece. I liked the whole driving metaphor and while I'm not a big fan of swearing in songs, I think the f word worked well here. The second verse was good as well, but for some reason I really couldn't get into it. However the "Well burn rubber for hours" line was pretty awesome. Thrid verse was great as well especially the "Two kids with empty lungs..." line. Personally, I thought you should say say something else besides "get your skates on". Skates just doesn't fit with the whole "cause it's time for the show thing". Anyways, clever lines and nice rhyme scheme. Great job, man.
#8
Cool,dude...Good song!!

Talking about teen life and the sex,drugs and rock & roll thingy!!..F-uck yeah,dude!!

Finally a non-sad song...Crit mines if you want!

They're on my sig!


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#9
That was punk rock. it was quite good, although it makes me hope you don't live near me so i wont get run over.....
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#10
soz finally got around to crit ur song
Quote by PunkFish182
Verse 1
Tonight is for dreaming things that make us forget
Fall asleep at the wheel and we're flirting with death
With my heart in your hands and your hands on the wheel
You're f---ing driving me crazy but I love how it feels.
love it, nothing id change here
favourite lines
fall asleep at the wheel and we're flirting with death
with my heart in ur hands and ur hands on the wheel


Verse 2
If you're ready to go, we've got no trail to erase
We'll burn rubber for hours, if you know what I mean
In a shark on a mission and the mission is clear
To leave the past in the dust and get the hell out of here.
I'm not one of those boys that's just here for the ride
if you're sick of the steering then we'll switch and I'll drive
We'll speed through the places where nobody will know
On our way to the city where the sun burns slow.

Chorus
We've only got a couple hours to live like this
Get in the car, and the life that we love will begin.
The sun is setting and I'm sick of letting it go down
Come with me, baby, and we'll drive this bastard into the ground.

Verse 3
One final drink and then we'll be on our way.
Raise a toast to the lovers who never could stay
If you come with me now, I'll be with you for life
All alone in the desert but I'm feeling all right
We've got nothing to go out to, I don't know if it's there.
Two kids with empty lungs, screaming, crying for air.
So we don't have a thing, we'll just go it alone
Get your skates on, babe, 'cause it's time for the show and...

Chorus
We've only got a couple hours to live like this
Get in the car, and the life that we love will begin.
The sun is setting and I'm sick of letting it go down
Come with me, baby, and we'll drive this bastard into the ground.

very strong piece here, just reading it i get a rhythm in my head, catchy, one of the best ive read. theres pretty much nothing id change about it.