#1
Until I Die

I can't stop thinking about you
and I don't know what to say or do
but I am worried about you all day
just hoping your alright and ok

I know I can't be there for you all the time
and please when you hear this don't you cry
but I fell for you and I don't know why
but I want to love you until I die

I wish you were here right by my side
and my love for you I will not hide
and I will do anything to make you happy
as long as it's my love that you see

I know I can't be there for you all the time
and please when you hear this don't you cry
but I fell for you and I don't know why
but I want to love you until I die

I know at this moment I can't have you
but I will listen if you need someone to talk to
I will try to be there when you need me
and I will hold you tight as long as can be

I know I can't be there for you all the time
and please when you hear this don't you cry
but I fell for you and I don't know why
but I want to love you until I die

I would die for you, I would cry for you
as long as you are happy
I would care for you, I would share for you
as long as you are in love with me
Last edited by eltyr18 at Sep 1, 2007,
#2
I'm thinking the title should be "Until I Die", but I'm not sure yet, can I get opinions, thanks.
#6
it reads like a cliche power ballad
come up with interesting imagery and get back to me
#7
Basic, but still very good. You can see alot of images in those words.
Thx 4 the crit on mine btw.
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