#1
Revolving Doors

i have been working on this song for about a year now
it has gone through many stages (at one point it had a while string and woodwind section)
but none of it really gave it the right mood. so i stripped it back to the basics
think creep (acoustic) - radiohead. feedback apreciated.

-Notes-

-4/4
-120 Bmp
-Ment to be played on an steel string guitar. if not got one to hand turn OFF the overdrive.
-The fingerpicking part at the start is just an idea of the pattern. i normaly throw in some fills.


Intro

E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E E
||--------------------|---------0--------|---------1--------|---------0----------||
||o---------1--------|-------------0----|-----3-------3----|-----------1------o||
||------0-------0----|-----0-----0---0-|---2---2---2---2-|-----2-------2-----||
||----2---2---2---2-|---2---2----------|-0----------------|---2---2-------2---||
||o-3----------------|-2-----------------|------------------|-0-----------------o||
||--------------------|-------------------|-------------------|---------------------||

|C |Em |Dm |Am |
|C |Em |Dm |Am |

Verse 1

C Em
revolving door
Dm Am
revolving door girl
C Em
im in a spin
Dm Am
i am so dizzy
C Em
wherever i turn
Dm Am
you will always be there

Chorus

C Em
whatever i do
Dm Am
you will always find me
C Em Am
you will always be there

Break

|C |Em |Dm |Am |
|C |Em |Dm |Am |
|C |F |Am |Am7|
|C |Em |Am |Am |

Verse 2


C Em
Single Bed
Dm Am
Single bed girl
C Em
i am so sprung
Dm Am
im going crazy
C Em
Whatever i do
Dm Am
you will always be there

Chorus

C Em
whatever i do
Dm Am
you will always find me
C Em Am
you will always be there

Outro

|C |Em |Dm |Am |
|C |Em |Dm |Am |
|C |F |Am |Am7|
|C |Em |Am |Am | Rake last Am
#2
How are we meant to crit this with so many chords and all linked through. It doesn't seem like much writing though.
#3
Agreed. Too short to crit IMO, it looks as if you have a good idea swirling in your head though, so lengthen it a bit and repost.