#1
Hey this is a poem/song i think it could go either way. C4C


The hate and disgust of a million souls
Start to wander around u hoplessly
Waiting for you to return to them
Broken, afraid and scarred

The self pity of this monster inside of me
Has grown and developed in no beauty
But rest assure
I know the rest
Tomorrow is your final test

Selflessly you wander around for ages
Broken in the trap of the damned
A crazy thought starts to stir around in your mind

The dreams of a self pitied monster
Are horrible in thought
But when you’ve lived like he as
Its not such a bad lot

The chaos of the inner beast
Starts to sooth the soul gently
The thought of you slowly drives me insane
Once again I feel the thought drive into my brain

And as we race to get to the top
We know we must not ever stop
And this is the beasts last inner thought
We know now that we are caught
"You've got to dance like nobody else is watching.
Dream like you will live forever.
Live like you're going to die tomorrow,
and love like it is never gonna hurt."
-- James Dean (1931-1955)

Quote by JakeTheDuck
This man has the right idea.


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oh yeahhh
#2
Very well written song, it flows and rhymes just right. Throughout the song it follows the same idea, and it gives off a very clear tone and mood, of well you know..
The only issue i really find is that.. it's kinda generic, not completly, but I feel that bands have done the same type of thing. It doesn't bring something entirely new to the table, the words. A new perspective on this would be nice, just feels to me like it's been done before, you know? Other than that a good set of lyrics or poem.

Well if that has helped at all.
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=646922
There my song called "Reprise"