#1
Song: I can't remember writing something like this before so it may not be that good. The subject as well has been done to death, but hopefully there are some things expressed differently to the norm.


The cat plays constantly
with balls of wool.
The dog chases rabbits
through pastures green.
The owl eyes the mice
who run through the grass,
thinking themselves invisible to threat from above.

But just beyond the hilltop
the bombs are tearing streets apart.
The city billows smoky pleas
of help to an ignorant world.

And the dictators of democracy
fight for the freedom of others.
But to them the enemy takes forms
of mothers, sisters and brothers.
No one is safe in the firing line.
The signs by the side of the road
read “Welcome To A Strange World.”

There is blood on the walls
and bodies in the halls.
Screams are coming from below;
the wishing wells where dreams used to grow.

The antidote has yet to be found
as soldiers lie dead on the ground.
Brothers in arms are brothers in death,
whispers of thanks on countless last breaths.

And the signs by the side of the road
read “Welcome To A Strange World.”
#3
Good ending, and I especially liked "Brothers in arms are brothers in death,
whispers of thanks on countless last breaths", however the rhyming scheme seemed at times like you were trying too hard to rhyme, like maybe it would've flowed better without it?
#4
Nice. I liked the second verse quite a lot, as it depicts the horrors of war eloquently and concisely. The subject of war is, as you already observed, not a particularly innovative one, but writing intriguing political songs is an art, and you're certainly talented if this is your first piece in the vein.

Also, "the dictators of democracy" is a great expression. Good work, all in all, but the song is in need of some thought-provoking metaphors/similes in my opinion.