#1
The Car Crash
by Hand Grenade Heroics

I feel like running
headfirst into traffic
to see the bright lights
engulf my sight
moments before impact

thoughts running through my head
how did it come to this
how could I have let my guard down
how did she enter without a sound
why couldn’t I resist

shattered hearts, broken glass
this is a car crash
(this is a car crash)
this is a car crash

as the tires start to squeal
and the brakes give way
they whisper to the figure before
today is not your day

a quick glance at the dash
reveals the fatal time
the moment of impact
the end of the line

shattered hearts, broken glass
this is a car crash
(this is a car crash)
this is a car crash

change my mind, save me tonight
from this car crash
(from this car crash)
from this car crash

white lines fade from sight
the horizon grows dim
if only i could turn back time
if only i could be him

not sure about the title yet,
also this is the first draft of this piece, so crit away/give me ideas on how to improve it
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You should title it "Understanding in a Car Crash," since this sounds like a rip off of that Thursday song.

I'm not trying to be harsh, but if you listen to that song you will hear an eery resemblance. It also uses a car crash as a metaphor for a failed relationship, and some of the imagery is very similar.
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