#1
verse---
Breaking in tombs, and opening wounds.
Through this night, i shall fight.
Charging in, keeping out of sight
Sticking to the shadows
While attacking from behind
My blades are never kind

chorus---

My daggers slice,
At you twice.
The wounds aren't deep
But the poisons they seep
Your muscles slow
As you heart begins to race
Your eyes scream murder
As the color leaves your face.


My hands are stained
From the riches i have gained
I'm always hidden in stealth
As i drain your health
I'll distract and react
Before you know i have attacked

chorus ----

My daggers slice,
At you twice.
The wounds aren't deep
But the poisons they seep
Your muscles slow
As you heart begins to race
Your eyes scream murder
As the color leaves your face.

break down or bridge---

NEVER SEEN
NEVER HEARD
NEVER SCARED
NEVER STIRRED
ALWAYS MEAN
ALWAYS BLURRED
ALWAYS PREPARED
ALWAYS ABSURD

chorus -agin---

My daggers slice,
At you twice.
The wounds aren't deep
But the poisons they seep
Your muscles slow
As you heart begins to race
Your eyes scream murder
As the color leaves your face.
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so it prolly needs another verse or something any crit helps
#2
I thought it was a reasonably well- written song, even if it's not really my cup of tea. still, I think the song might be a little better, a little more impactful (not sure if that's a word), if it had a deeper meaning than "I just killed you". there were also just a few lines I didn't really dig, like "my blades are never kind", which just seems like you're forcing the rhyme, and "as I drain your health", which seems very Warcrafty.

'preciate it if you'd crit my song (in sig)