#1
Verse I:
I knew everything couldn't stay the same
I can't remember your face,
You can't remember my name.

Verse II:
You're quite sober at body,
much too sober at mind.
I knew I wasn't worth a minute of your precious time.

Pre-Chorus:
I wait for you every moment,
hold onto every breath.
But every second that I'm with you
is a second I regret.

Chorus:
Use up all my ink and paper on the words I can't describe.
My foot held down by anchors, of the love I couldn't find.
Don't leave me in the dark tonight, I have something left to say.
I hate what you do to me, but I have no other way.

Verse III:
Can't force a smile to save your life.
I'm almost gone
Now's your chance to hold on tight,
because you might lose me tonight.

Pre-Chorus:
I wait for you every moment,
hold onto every breath.
But every second that I'm with you
is a second I regret.

Chorus:

Use up all my ink and paper on the words I can't describe.
My foot held down by anchors, of the love I couldn't find.
Don't leave me in the dark tonight, I have something to say
I hate what you do to me, but I have no other way.

Chorus:

Use up all my ink and paper on the words I can't describe.
My foot held down by anchors, of the love I couldn't find.
Don't leave me in the dark tonight, I have something to say
I hate what you do to me, but I have no other way.

Outro:

Can you come back to me; or is it too late?
Is it too late?
Is it too late?

Please let me know what you think of these lyrics. Thanks.
GEAR:
Vantage Ghost Gibson "The Paul" copy
Fender FM-100H half-stack
Regal vintage 30W class A amp head (handcrafted in Montreal)
Last edited by Hugsy at Aug 29, 2007,
#2
kind of tacky rhymes, I would try not to end each line in way/say, time/mind, describe/find etc.

I like the anchors theme, it reminds me of archers, but maybe use more nautical metaphors.
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#3
Hm okay, thanks for the advice.
GEAR:
Vantage Ghost Gibson "The Paul" copy
Fender FM-100H half-stack
Regal vintage 30W class A amp head (handcrafted in Montreal)
#4
This is absolutly great, i loved te rhyme scheme.

Great lines as well, i dont think i have much to say anything bad about.

Crit one of mine?

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