#1
this poem is called love. it was written by a friend of mine. please crit.

never felt this way before.
violated.
you touched me and stole my heart.
i wasnt even looking.

you came out of nowhere.
angel?
for from the heavens you were sent.
to cure this lonely soul.

we are one thought.
person.
split into two.
opposites attract.

we are so not cool.
love.
has no label.
i need you, dork.

our love from.
above.
it was brought by the dove.
the dove of peace, and our love.

perfect world.
#2
Lol violated? "I need you dork?" It sounds actually kinda funny, in a bad way though. Like Miss South Carolina on Friday bad. I would say ditch the last stanza, the one with the dove, and maybe u could salvage the rest...

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#3
Quote by Black_Fender
Miss South Carolina on Friday bad.



lol, that was so retarded.

but yes, I pretty much agree, ditch the last stanza.
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