#1
This is like a fast song. I've always wanted to do one, never found the words. So C4C just leave the link .



The Word Is Out


Take away, take away
All consideration
Of Who, when, where.
An Abomination
A Catastrophe waiting
Waiting, to happen

As you knew, as we knew
This might take a second.
As if you care.
You just sit there and you beckon
So just take the time
To realize

We all knew that you just wanted to see
The word is out; yea and we’re all starting to bleed
I just stand hoping that they can’t see me
I try my hardest (it’s so hard) just to hide my breathing.

Just a few seconds darling, it will all come to end
You’re a fool, just to jump, just to try to defend
That it’s secret, just, still, you know you’re breathing?
Take it in, for a while, don’t you adore that singing.

Forget all fake lives.
Just throw them like knives.

Drink deep, small sips
It won’t last for long
All hope will fall
Like rocketing sky’s
Heaven, hell, and earth
Even if you strive
Will all take your life.

Drink deep, small sips
I repeat.
Drink deep, small Sips
I repeat
Drink deep, small sips
I repeat
Drink deep, small sips
I repeat!

We all knew that you just wanted to see
The word is out; yea and we’re all starting to bleed
I just stand hoping that they can’t see me
I try my hardest (it’s so hard) just to hide my breathing.

Just a few seconds darling, it will all come to end
You’re a fool, just to jump, just to try to defend
That it’s secret, just, still, you know you’re breathing?
Take it in, for a while, don’t you adore that singing.

There coming close
It’s all over now
Take one last breath
Believe it’s your last?
Don’t think
Just wait.
It will all be a blast

We’re dead
We’re dead
Do you feel your bed?
Last edited by thefoundationof at Sep 1, 2007,
#2
hmmmm the imagery was kind of neat. The flow seems kind of choppy on paper, but you said it's fast, and I can see it working better when put to music. You seemed to kind of write about a common theme, but I liked it anyway. You kept it from getting boring.
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