#1
This piece wants to be a nice slow ballad.
In the performance of a hard rock band.


Thinking of you,
thinking of you,
thinking of you,
my sleeping beauty..

I could of passed you on the street,
I could of missed your eyes in the crowd..
I could be at home, trying to forget,
but I'm here with you..

Why are you so far away?
And yet so close in my heart.
I feel like rippin' my heart out,
and entering it, to be with you..

Sweet dreams, my darling.
You'll always be my dream come true.
A sweet dream indeed..

Dreams are washed away by the falling rain,
picturing you, in your short red blouse.
I'll always have my sweet sweet pain
from the stings of the frozen rose (..that's you..)

You said you love me,
but did it even occur to you.
That I cannot stand those words,
if I can't be with you.

I'd rather be left out
and secretly think of you.
And if we'd pass each other,
I'd be falling for you..

I'D BE FALLING FOR YOU!

Sweet dreams, my darling...
You'll always be my dream come true.
A sweet dream indeed...


Thank you.
#2
Dreams are washed away by the falling rain,
picturing you, in your short red blouse.
I'll always have my sweet sweet pain
from the stings of the frozen rose (..that's you..)

Above is the best part .

And all other leftout's part are cliche. Some of them are really big one.use some metaphors or imagery . It might be a gr8 and fun filled song to perform but lyrically it's
not anyrthing gr8. So my advise is go read the tips thread it's in the technique forum.
or just curse me for giving u a harsh critique.

Andy
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