#1
This song is my adaptation/arrangement/take of an old, if slightly obscure, American folk/bluegrass song. Musically, its lively and a little edgy, with some nice fiddle and acoustic guitar. Crit for crit.

Sally Let Your Bangs Hang Down

I met a girl from old Kentucky;
She was happy and go-lucky.
Sally let your bangs hang down.
She used to call me honey-bunny;
Just to make me spend my money.
Sally let your bangs hand down!

Well, the Father, Son, and the Holy Ghost,
These are the things that I fear the most,
But Sally's trying to bring a good man down.
I said, "Sally, why don't you change your ways?"
She says "I change a new man every day."
Sally let your bangs hang down!

Sally calls me her man,
But she's getting all she can.
Sally let your bangs hang down.
Now I must be confessin',
Sally's really kept me guessin'.
Sally let your bangs hang down!

Well, the Father, Son, and the Holy Ghost,
These are the things that I fear the most,
But Sally's trying to bring a good man down.
I said, "Sally, why don't you change your ways?"
She says "I change a new man every day."
Sally let your bangs hang down!

(Little instrumental/breakdown)

I took Sally to church one Sunday;
Tried to learn her how to pray.
Sally let your bangs hang down.
Well, Sally didn't see the light;
She packed her bags and left that night.
Sally let your bangs hang down!

Well, the Father, Son, and the Holy Ghost,
These are the things that I fear the most,
But Sally's trying to bring a good man down.
I said, "Sally, why don't you change your ways?"
She says "I change a new man every day."
Sally let your bangs hang down!

(Breakdown, which goes into a diminuendo and ritardando)

Sally met a man from New York City;
He was rich, and she was pretty.
He said, "Sally, will you be my wife?"
So he changed his will and he gave her his money;
They got married, then things turned funny.
That poor man didn't last a second night!

(Slowly crescendo and accel. in this next verse)

Sally killed her husband for his money,
Then fled home to Kentucky.
Sally, you better run.
She ran over mountain and hill,
But the police caught up in Louisville.
Sally let your bangs hang down!

Well, the Father, Son, and the Holy Ghost,
These are the things that I fear the most,
But Sally's trying to bring a good man down.
I said, "Sally, why don't you change your ways?"
She says "I change a new man every day."
Sally let your bangs hang down!
Sally let your bangs hang down!
Dem Dry Bones
Current read: I Am America (And You Can Too) (Stephen Colbert)
Album of the Week: Four Thieves Gone (The Avett Brothers)
Last edited by doctor_rocker at Sep 1, 2007,
#2
This was very very entertaining i must say it did sound really folk and all that. The only thing That bothered me was the repetition of Sally let your bangs hang down, twice in some verses, But i dont listen to this type of music much so I wouldnt really know if it would sound good in music.

"Sally met a man from New York City;
He was rich, and she was pretty.
He said, "Sally, will you be my wife?"
So he changed his will and he gave her his money;
They got married, then things turned funny.
That poor man didn't last a second night!"

I liked this part a lot, it had a nice flow. good job.

Crit Mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?p=10563078#post10563078
#3
Well the repetition of "Sally let your bangs hang down" is kind of like a mini-refrain. The verses progress in couplets and then return to the repeated line. It works in the music.

Thanks for the crit.
Dem Dry Bones
Current read: I Am America (And You Can Too) (Stephen Colbert)
Album of the Week: Four Thieves Gone (The Avett Brothers)