#1
Well kids, it's been a while but here's my new song:

"Drums Kick Ass"

Sally said “I just got to get away from here
Don’t wanna fight, don’t want no tears”
She moved from her little old town in Minnesota
Now she’s havin’ fun in the sun living free living free!

She said “Drums Kick Ass”
Pour some more sugar into my glass
“Drums Kick Ass”
Party at night and sleep all day

“Oh let me have my way” she said
“I just can’t seem to get away!”

She woke up in a dumpster blood at her sight
Didn’t know where she was last night
She married a drummer in a rock and roll band
Now she’s under the gun, on the run, living free living free

She said “Drums Kick Ass”
Pour some more sugar into my glass
“Drums Kick Ass”
Party at night and sleep all day

“Oh let me have my way” she said
“I just can’t seem to get away!”

(Guitar Solo)

Sally said “I just got to get away from here
Don’t wanna fight, don’t want no tears”
She moved from her little old town in Minnesota
Now she’s havin’ fun in the sun living free living free!

She said “Drums Kick Ass”
Pour some more sugar into my glass
“Drums Kick Ass”
Party at night and sleep all day

“Oh let me have my way” she said
“I just can’t seem to get away!” (X2)
Last edited by KileManA7X at Sep 1, 2007,
#2
Why Sally?
The DNA results show that Jeremy Kyle is a nob.


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#4
Also, I think you have too many "get"s in 'I just can't get seem to get away'.
The DNA results show that Jeremy Kyle is a nob.


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#11
i don't know if its just me but the whole thing kind of has almost a country feel to it - don't know if your going for a sort of alt-country, folk rock kind of thing?

i like it though, classic tale of youthful escapism and embrace of life lol.

only have two points though - if it was me, i think i wouldn't bother to have the repeated "livin' free" at the end of each verse - one would work better i feel.

also - you've said "under the gun, on the run, livin' free". this just seems a little oxymoronic to me, seeing as under the gun means "working under huge pressure" which doesn't seem to fit with "livin' free"

part from that i like it.

would love if you could have a look at my new piece -https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=663174 , though i'll understand if you don't seeing as i've been very little, if any, help here.
#12
No I wanted it to be like a glam metal type of song. And she's "under pressure" with her family but when she leaves them, she's living free.