#1
Erm...
Hey
Never actually wrote one of these before but i got bored and i was thinking "Bitch"
So yeah. Its not very lengthy at all and i think this could be a chorus or summat. It's a work in progress so I'll go back to it probably and theres some chords there too. You can strum em or do em once. Maybe in the final chorus you play em once for more drama.


C5
You bitch I feel let down
G5
Used to love you now i'm turned around
A5
You've really gone to town with your
F5
Lies

C5
You wh*re walk out that door
G5
Walk out of my life once more
A5
There's nothing between us
F5
Now


Thats all I've got
Pitiful, I know but if i didnt write it down I'd forget it
Any ideas for the verses?
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#2
Sorry I don't like it, I'm not much into the swearing in songs, i would use images instead of swears.
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#3
they're not BAD swears
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#4
Something with more substance would be good for the verse, like something with a nice metaphor or something.

Simple is sometimes the best thing in terms of choruses, I guess. As ong as this is like sleezey rock, or angry punk then I can dig it. heh.

Nothing of too much depth here, so a full crit would be useless.

Mine?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=663845