#2
I think the guitar is just slightly out of tune. The opening humming is also slightly out of tune, but from there on the vocals are really sweet. I like the tempo changes. The only thing that needs some serious reworking is the guitar solo at the end.

Anyway, C4C http://profile.ultimate-guitar.com/poona/ check out my cover of the Four Horsemen(Metallica) click the one that says 'vocals redone'.
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Washburn Dime V Pro
Peavy Bandit 112
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A few of my originals can be found at

www.bebo.com/artificial-reality
#5
^^^Yeah I was in chorus for a few years in high school and went to All State Chorus(only guy to go), so I knew I could sing, it's just a matter of knowing the right notes to sing I guess. And I need a new guitar badly I know, piece of crap 60 dollar guitar bought at Wal-Mart ha ha...Anyway, I fed your piece also.
#6
thanx for the crit had a listen to your songs and i think they're great. Got some good haunting sounds going on.
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