#1
This is an as of yet, untitled metal song for my current band. it is still a work in progress. it currently lacks a bass line, but that should be added soon.

crit and ideas are welcome, honesty would be nice as well.

thank you, and enjoy!!

will C4C
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revised riff.zip
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Last edited by djn419 at Sep 5, 2007,
#2
this is pretty sik!
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drums r really gud, nice double bass.
#3
The riffs in themselves were fine.... Nothing spectacular, but not bad.

But the drums for the most part were really, really annoying, as the snare was basically used as a metronome. And too much double bass (The drums need more creativity in other words).
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#4
Pretty sick sweeping ;-)

Overall, I'm not much into death metal, so I can't quite mark it, but I liked some of the riffs, especially when it gets slower.
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#5
The riffs are pretty cool. They sound good but aren't really catchy or anything. The sweeping was very cool though. Maybe if you changed some stuff around and added al little more it would be less repetative though. Riff 2 is probably my favorite in the song.

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#6
thanks for all the crit!!

my influences include The Absence, Wintersun, The Black Dahlia Murder, and other melodic death metal bands.

i understand what your saying about the drums. they are meant to be a backing track for the guitar. i tried to write what i thought would fit them best, especially with the tension buildup i was aiming for with riff 2, 3, and 4.

i have been trying to think of something to add to it, like a harmony section of the song, but i really dont know where to put it. if you have any ideas, i will be quite thankful.
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#7
I liked the opening riff, it sounded cool but melodic at the same time. I also enjoyed the tremolo picking parts, for the same reason. One thing, though, the sweeping parts don't sound that good with the chords you have them playing with. You might want to change some of the notes there, because it just doesn't seem to mold together, IMO. Other than that, this song was ok, those were the few parts that caught my attention.
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