#2
sorry, but I just think it sounds horrible.

your vocals seem off key (too high), the guitar part seems... way deeper than it should (are you using power chords instead of major chords? listen to the record, I'm pretty sure poison uses major chords for the rhythm)

I didn't even get to the electric part...

work on it, you'll get it.
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