#1
Right so I'm pretty bored and I've been putting together a CV in the last hour or so because I desperately need a job. So I thought I'd post it here. Can anyone see any blatant spelling mistakes or grammar stuff?

Any ideas to sell myself better or make myself seem more employable? The types of Jobs im looking for are mainly either general sales stuff, negotiating for an estate agent or if I can't find anything else, office work.


Christopher Stone
13 Fortescue Road, Parkstone
Poole, ---- --
Tel: ----- --- ---
Mobile: ----- --- ---
ChristophStone@hotmail.co.uk


Profile:
A highly motivated and confident individual with excellent communication skills developed by working with large numbers of customers. Reliable, trustworthy and organised. Able to work competently alone or as part of a team, with an outgoing personality and a positive attitude. Enjoys interacting with the public in all situations and learns new skills quickly.

Education:
2005 – 2007 Poole Grammar school
3 GCE A Levels: English [C], Graphics [D], Religion and Philosophy [D].

2001 – 2005 Poole Grammar School
11 GCSEs: English Language [A*], English Literature [A], Religion and Philosophy [A], History [A], Art , Graphics , Mathematics , German
Chemistry , Biology , Physics [C].

Experience:
2005 – Date Lighthouse, Poole’s Centre For The Arts
Host
Part time casual work involving customer service and relations.
Responsibilities and achievements:

§ Assisting in the running of major productions and shows
§ Ensuring customer needs are met
§ Dealing with queries and problems from the public
§ Organising and overseeing the sale of merchandise
§ Being generally friendly and approachable
§ Working in the shop and on the tills.


2004 Rossmore Library
Library Assistant
Two weeks full time work experience.
Responsibilities and Achievements:

§ Working on the front desk welcoming customers
§ Using the computer system to lend/return books
§ Organising books via the Dewy Decimal System
§ Created new displays for the children’s section
§ Placing orders for books with other Libraries using the phone
§ Collecting payments for overdue loans.

Computer Skills:
Certified Microsoft office Specialist with qualifications in both Word and Excel.

Additional Information:
Driving Licence: Full, Clean.

Interests:
Travelling – Have just returned from a 3000 mile European road trip with a friend in a 51 year old car which we restored together. Highlights of the trip were the amazing people we met along the way, and seeing new places.
Music – Large and varied music collection, as well as playing bass guitar in a local band.

Referees:
Lisa Love

Mr. K. M. McDonald


I've omitted some things, like my phone numbers, postcode, and the adresses of my referees because I don't really trust the pit Plus the layout is messed up slightly, but other than that it's all there

What d'ya think?




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#2
Don't right about yourself from another persons perspective.
Don't use the funky Double 'S' thing.
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#3
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A highly motivated and confident individual with excellent communication skills developed by working with large numbers of customers. Reliable, trustworthy and organised. Able to work competently alone or as part of a team, with an outgoing personality and a positive attitude. Enjoys interacting with the public, in all situations, and learns new skills quickly.
Don't know if that was really necessary, but I'm a bit of a comma nazi.
#4
In your profile you talk about yourself in the 3rd person and in your interests you talk about yourself in the 1st person.
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In your profile you talk about yourself in the 3rd person and in your interests you talk about yourself in the 1st person.


and you need to use 1 st.


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#6
I prefer third person to first for this sort of thing, sounds more official. And the double S thing only appeared when I C/P'd it here, in word it become a small square bullet point.

And toilet, I think its debatable whether commas are necessary there. Maybe the last one, but I prefer the flow without the first.




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I prefer third person to first for this sort of thing, sounds more official.


Well, keep it consistent. You can't start in one and end in another.
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Travelling – Just returned from a 3000 mile European road trip in a 51 year old car restored with a friend. Highlights of the trip were meeting amazing people along the way, and seeing new places.
Music – Large and varied music collection, as well as playing bass guitar in a local band.

Better?




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And toilet, I think its debatable whether commas are necessary there. Maybe the last one, but I prefer the flow without the first.
I was thinking subordinate clause, but I phail'd.
#11
I dont know about other people, but in my CV, I like to include a section containing "Business skills", ie extensive knowledge of Word, Excel, etc; leadership qualities; communication abilites. I also like to mention the fact that I am very proactive and show initiative.

It's all well and good saying you have skills like these, but you also have to give of examples of where you used them, and how you obtained them, without making it into a novel.
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3 GCE A Levels: English [C], Graphics [D], Religion and Philosophy [D].

Is it supposed to be GCE or is it GCSE ? Im not being a fanny its probly a typo.
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Travelling – Just returned from a 3000 mile European road trip in a 51 year old car restored with a friend. Highlights of the trip were meeting amazing people along the way, and seeing new places.
Music – Large and varied music collection, as well as playing bass guitar in a local band.

Better?


It does work in third person but you generally don't start sentences with 'just' and 'large'. It's not an abbreviated newspaper advertisement, it's your CV.

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Is it supposed to be GCE or is it GCSE ? Im not being a fanny its probly a typo.


A GCE is an A-Level.
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#14
Would you suggest I put it all into 1st person, or change that section again? The problem I have writing in 1st person is that all my sentences seem to start with "I am" or I have"




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Would you suggest I put it all into 1st person, or change that section again? The problem I have writing in 1st person is that all my sentences seem to start with "I am" or I have"

Keep it all in one. It looks really strange, otherwise. You have to go for some consistency. I suggest 1st person.

Remember, its not an essay. You can use fragments as well, without going into 3rd person, or 1st person, or whichever you choose. They work for either.
#16
"A highly motivated and confident individual with excellent communication skills developed by working with large numbers of customers, I am reliable, trustworthy and organised. Able to work competently alone or as part of a team, with an outgoing personality and a positive attitude, I enjoy interacting with the public in all situations and learn new skills quickly."

Does this sound OK?

Thanks for the help by the way everybody, it is really appreciated




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#17
Goooooo identity theft!
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#18
Good luck with that when you just have my name, some of my address, and exam results.




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Good luck with that when you just have my name, some of my address, and exam results.


That wasn't a threat.


... or was it?
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#20
why did you leave your postcode out? 30 seconds work told me it is BH12 2LH. 15 more gave me your home phone number. i wont post that. i'm not THAT much of a jerk.

how silly.

oh. anyway. for what its worth, your CV is ok. its not that great, but i dont think it matters that much for the jobs you'll be applying for.
my name is matt. you can call me that if you like.
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#21
People can get pretty much any information they want on the net, I know that. But I didnt want to make it any easier than it already is.




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Good luck with that when you just have my name, some of my address, and exam results.


Oh believe me it's more than enough.


Anyway, you shouldn't be so detalied and descriptive about your interests. Just make it:


Interests: Travelling, music, bass guitar.


That's it. Nobody cares about your 3000 mile trip.
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