#1
Hi all,

I wrote and recorded a song tonight, and I'd appreciate some feedback.

www.myspace.com/liammccormack

its the first song, called "hey". I threw it together using garageband, and i'm quite happy with it, but I know it could use improvement, so if you have helpful criticism I'd love to hear it. Oh, and I can't sing but I'm all I've got so if you could just comment on the melody and not the quality that'd be great.

Also, I'll gladly return crit for crit, so just give me a link and I'll give it a listen and let you know what I think.

Thanks in advance.

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#2
i liked it, got it stuck in my head XD

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#3
I like it. It's gets stuck in your head.

You did the drums with garageband? They sound extremely real, I can't get the drums on FL to sound like that.

I like the chorus a lot.
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#4
Thanks guys for the crit.

I've updated the song so that the sound is a bit tighter and there are now two separate sets of lyrics for the verses.

Thanks again.
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"Ninjas aren't dangerous. They're more afraid of you than you are of them."

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#5
Intro is cool. I like the vocals...they're kind of wierd but catchy...they have some sort of hidden appeal lol. The distortion sounds wierd though. too much static. Also too low in the mix. I like that synth type thing in the middle. The guitar part after is really good, probably my favorite part.

Good job dude!
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