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This is my first time to give songwriting a shot. I've been missing home a lot lately so i decided to write it down in a song. This is basically my first song. It still needs work. Please post only constructive criticism. Don't say things like you suck, go somewhere else or say i'm emo, cause i'm not. That won't help me be a better song writer.


It's been awhile since I heard your voice
The pounding of the drums and all of the noise
It's been awhile, It's been awhile I know
I can still hear the music playing
All the guitars are resonating
Oh how bad it was, Oh how good it was

Retracing all my steps in memory lane
Reliving the greater times of the days

Staying up all night
Gazing at the stars in the midnight sky
Waking up so late
To see the bright sun shining in our face
The memories are still alive
All of us so loud and proud
Those were the days when
I had the best time of my life

Taking rides around the city of lights
Waving at almost anyone that may pass
Oh how fun it was, yeah it made me laugh
People thought we're all so crazy
They just don't know what it all means
How we didn't care, no we didn't care

I can still remember our favorite songs on the radio
I will never, never let this go

Staying up all night
Gazing at the stars in the midnight sky
Waking up so late
To see the bright sun shining in our face
The memories are still alive
All of us so loud and proud
Those were the days when
I had the best time of my life

(I'll probably turn this into an instrumental part)

Staying up all night
Gazing at the stars in the midnight sky
Waking up so late
To see the sun shining down our face
The memories are still alive
All of us so loud and proud
Those were the days when
I had the best time of my life
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#2
i think its good

Quote by WinterMadness76
Just about anything that has the word "core" or "grind" in it is guaranteed to suck 100%. I think I could make better music if I held a pick between my asscheeks and strummed.

Quote by Chickenparts
WOOT!!!!!


ASSCORE!!!!!!!!