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Hello everyone. I'm new to these forums, and I thought I'd post some "lyrics" that I have written. I was previously in a band, that didn't last long, and we "wrote songs" and they were awful. Now, abbout a year and a half later, I have started trying to write lyrics again, and maybe form another band. I don't think my lyrics are good, but I have printed many of the lyric writing guides from this site. Anyway, here are the lyrics:

Verse:

Did you mean it
when you said you loved me?
Expressing false emotions
you make me sick!
you faked it all
ripped out my heart

Chorus:

You make me sick!
You're twisted and perverse
you're a backstabber
and a liar

Verse 2:

Now that you're gone
i'm so much better off
you're not holding me down
anymore
i'm alive,
and glad you're gone.


Like i said, it needs ALOT of work. I was just sitting in my room last nigh listening to Nirvana, and decided to "write" a song. I will take any advice you can give on how to make this better.

Thanks for your time.
Last edited by frosty_frost09 at Sep 7, 2007,