#1
Verse 1:Im going numb
and you cant even see

but im dieing to show
wanting to show you

I want to open you eyes
and show you the world

I want you to see it
see it so clearly

I want you to know
how much i cant stand it


wanting to see you
wanting to feel you
(i also thought about using know instead of feel)

chorus: You cant find away, out of my mind
I can't do a thing but dream about you all night

verse 2:

I tried to sleep
but I cant close my eyes

Cause I know i need her
I know that i need her

I Tried to keep you
off of my mind

but i know that i need you
i know that i need you


its not that good in my opinion, i came up with it at 3 in the morning, and just sort of typed it out on the top of my head, so should i continue off of this idea, or no?
Last edited by FreeManson15 at Sep 9, 2007,
#2
I think you should continue with it, because you're expressing yourself and it shows....but I'm just confused about the flow of it?
#3
Its very hard to explain how this flows, it does though.

like is sing the first two line then the next to are sort of like a mini chorus to the two lines before it, idk, thats horrible explanation, you most likely have no clue what im talking about by this point. haha.