#1
I had to write a sonnet for english. My teacher said he had a soft spot for comical sonnets so before I turn it in tomorrow, i want some feedback:

The sky goes dark, my hands are quite sweaty
I must continue, keep my soldiers' line
Shall this be death, of friend or enemy?
My army can attack at any time

You think you're sly, but in fact you're shallow
Your army is level one mortality
I've got Charmander, a level nine Spearow
Shall we battle for poké sovereignty?

I throw it down, I started with Jigglypuff
My fists are clenched and my heart is beating
Its hard to conquer, level five Wigglytuff
But your noobishness I'll be defeating

And now, my friends, I have caught them all
Through grueling battles I've got the poké ball
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Last edited by WlCmToTheJungle at Sep 11, 2007,
#2
you should put u've got master ball at the end. makes it seem like uve accomplished more. lol. YOU DONT WANNA BE A POKEMON NOOB.
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#3
Quote by funkbass369
you should put u've got master ball at the end. makes it seem like uve accomplished more. lol. YOU DONT WANNA BE A POKEMON NOOB.



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#4
you said u've got the pokeball at the end...you should put masterball. you were just speaking english and now u obvously cant read it and your typing in spanish now ...so what is up?!?!?!
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Nashville Tele
Martin 00015M
Hot Rod Deluxe
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Hendrix Crybaby Wah
#5
It's well written...kind of an immature topic in my opinion, but it's well written none the less.

crit for crit?

mines titled

"An Attempt to Revive"...it's on the first page.
Last edited by HLrocker at Sep 11, 2007,
#6
Quote by HLrocker
It's well written...kind of an immature topic in my opinion, but it's well written none the less.



ha, well, the whole reason why ( I ) think its funny is because how serious the "protagonist" gets about a freakin pokemon battle. I personally think pokemon is stupid, which is why I thought it would be funny to write about
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