#1
This is a song that I pretty much just now wrote in a matter of 15 minutes lol... its not a technical masterpiece and its not the deepest song in the world but its got a cool vibe. Its really punky with power chords and the whole nine yards it reminds me of the ramones/nirvana if that makes any sense nnnnneways its called amnesia.

the color of your eyes escapes me
its been so long now since ive seen your face
i still wonder why you gave me
anything at all its all erased

why did you come to me
i dont care i dont care
why did you come to me
i dont care i dont care
why did you come to me
i dont care i dont care
i refuse to care

i walked along the streets tonight
thinking of the moon above my head
your the furthest from my mind
for all i know by now u could be dead

why did u come to me
i dont care i dont care
why did u come to me
i dont care i dont care
why did you come to me
i dont care i dont care
i refuse to care

(GUITAR SOLO)

still from time to time i think about that day
but im sure jack and i can kill that memory

why did you come to me
i dont care i dont care
why did you come to me
i dont care i dont care
why did you come to me
i dont care i dont care
i refuse to care
#2
I like it man. I like the whole thing.
Except there are two small imperfections that I found, first stanza last line
I would have put 'Anything at all, it's all been erased' to me that sounds more complete.
Third stanza, third line
I would have put 'You're the furthest thing from my mind' or even 'thought'.

Keep it up man.
#3
I wish I could hear it the way you are hearing it in your head. The lyrics are good. I like them, and I like the detached feeling that you portray through the whole thing. But to be honest, I can't offer much in the way of a crit because I just can't hear it.

If you are gracious enough to give me a decent crit on any of mine, I will owe you one the next time you get a piece together. You'll just have to remind me.

peace and coconuts,
-ZC