this is a couple of months old but i think a crit would be cool. so crit for crit. thanks.

far far away
from the people i love
and yet i am standing
right in front of them
it is like i am invisible
to the eyes that god
has given them

every day
i see her face
and do not know
what to say
as she passes me by
without a sigh
or noticing
me crying inside

i am crying inside
looking into her eyes
and tears are falling
tears keep falling