#1
Confronted,
he wasn't half as clever
as his words had implied.

We chuckled
when his ego
was hit by the door
on the way out.

Eh. I doubt I'll return on this, as there's not really much to crit.
Had this little piece in me in a while finally got it down in a way I enjoy.
#3
Not much to crit at all, Jamie. There's a thought there, but it doesn't build or go anywhere.

Not one of your more stellar pieces.
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#4
Although I thought it has great potential, I didn't quite like it as a standalone piece. It seems like this should have been a part of a prose piece. You know. As a sentence.

Sorry for the honesty, if that makes sense.

edit : Oh, and, what she said