#1
This is a song me and my drummer wrote for our new band. It's basically about drunken fighting and the intense stupidity of it.

And Some More

Take a hit and bleed some more
The floor’s quite cold tonight
Get on your feet boy and give some more
They’re screaming for the fight
You’re all tanked up and ready to go
Spit out your teeth and give ‘em a show

You gotta
take some
give some
and some more
You gotta
take some
give some
take some more
You gotta
take some
give some
and some more
You gotta
take some
give some
break some more!

Fighting on, no backing down
Your blood’s gone cold alright
There’s broken bones and faces now
No time to be polite
You feel the burn not much remains
But you’ll heal and fight again

You gotta
take some
give some
and some more
You gotta
take some
give some
take some more
You gotta
take some
give some
and some more
You gotta
take some
give some
break some more!

It’s the magnetic attraction of fist to cheek
It’s the magnetic attraction we’ve got this week
It’s the magnetic attraction of fist to cheek
It’s the magnetic attraction we’ve got...
It’s the magnetic attraction of fist to cheek!
It’s the magnetic attraction we’ve got this week!
It’s the magnetic attraction of fist to cheek!
It’s the magnetic attraction we’ve got

You gotta
take some
give some
and some more
You gotta
take some
give some
take some more
You gotta
take some
give some
and some more
You gotta
take some
give some
break some more!

You gotta take take take take
take some more
you gotta break break break break
break some more
You gotta take take take take
take some more
you gotta break break break break
break some more


It's quite repetitive but therein lies it's charm and catchiness. C4C as always.

Shroom.
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More Graves To Fill (14-05-2009)
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Quote by ragebass89
That is ****in awesome! I mean not that he died, but the fact that monkeys killed him.

Last edited by KillerShroom at Sep 17, 2007,
#2
i quite like, even though the structure is simple. At first glance your chorus looks like it may be pants, but when you read it you feel it may have a singability to it.
You have picked a decent subject matter and somewhat captured the idiocy of it. incedently, what genre is this in?
Don't worry about the world coming to an end today. It is already tomorrow in Australia.
#3
I thought that about the chorus but once I put it to guitar it works really well i think and does have 'singability'.
For genre I'd say it's probably just your basic Rock/Hard Rock somewhere between Foos and Metallica would be my approximation.
Lyrics Crit 4 Crit
More Graves To Fill (14-05-2009)
Jus Ad Bellum (10-05-2009)

Quote by ragebass89
That is ****in awesome! I mean not that he died, but the fact that monkeys killed him.

#4
Nice. My first thought is that this would go well with the beat from "Light Grenades" by Incubus.
The transition to the chorus in the first verse is lot better than the second; the rhythm isn't quite the same and generally the whole fight-is-right-about-to-start-so-make-it-good air of the first verse seems a lot better to me, where as the last two lines of the second just seem like a verse extension.
Also, were you intending "ready go" in the first verse to be "ready to go?"