#1
It was homework in english to write about autumn (a poem), because we had been studying john keat's "to autumn" but it's too cheesy and so i asked him if i could do a rude one and he said ok, so i just did one which was kind of inspired by carcass, but obviously i couldn't be as sick as they were in some of theyre albums...so i just used some long words
here it is:

(before you read, the poem is about autumn and autumn poem writers, and the buffoons/rats are the poem writers like john keats)


Facinorous Crux

Rotting, putrefying, making me sick,
Posturing from the truth when it’s deictic.
“Hee hee I’m a flower!” – It’s opprobrious,
The futile richness of satiating filth.

Galling rascals vaunt your inanity,
I will burn them, annihilate their vanity.
Something so wasteful, negligible, and infantile,
In perjurious lullabies becomes abhorrent and execrable.

Crummy attempts to alleviate your derangement
are merely farcical jokes, or commiserable and dormant.
Nothing can extirpate your preposterous calamities,
Not hypocrites, cretins, gomerals or wallabies.

You're like mucid rats, you plebeian buffoons,
With your slimy avocations, you're fatuous racoons.
You eulogize a plague, venom, a ruination.
I will ravage your souls into desolation.


so what you think?
#4
yeah , i did, i started to do it in a sick jeff walker-ish voice but he said he couldn't understand a word i said so i had to say it plainly but it was still good =]
#5
AABBAABBAABBAABBAABB

and not even good to boot. Maybe you should start doing the real assignments and you'll have a grasp of how to better write prose.
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#6
"Crummy attempts to alleviate your derangement
are merely farcical jokes, or commiserable and dormant.
Nothing can extirpate your preposterous calamities"

That is nice.
#8
Cradle of Filth would love to hear from you in the future.
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#9
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Thesarus ist krieg.

just what I was going to say...make sure you include thesaurus.com on your sources list lol

Yet I liek it quite a bit.
#12
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When I came near losing my own life
It made me learn the true meaning of a smile
#13
you know if you want a serious crit, you should probably post in the Original Lyrics thread.


Nothing can extirpate your preposterous calamities,
Not hypocrites, cretins, gomerals or wallabies.


wallabies? aussies.
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