#1
We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down


It's been 8 damn years of servitude
to the conservative elite
But we're gonna ****ing knock you down
right off your ****ing feet.

we've got a righteous mission
not for money or for profit
but for the peoples rights!


We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down


we're gonna take this country back
back to the way it was formed when
Washington, and jefferson
had won

they call you patriots
but they dont know what that word means
cause you don't know what its like
to follow your own dreams


We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down


And now the people will fight back
and take charge of thier lives.
cause we're all tired of being
told what we're fighting for!


We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down

We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down
#2
eh..decently written, kind of repetive though I'd say keep the first 2 lines in the chorus, and right 2 seperate ones to go with it instead of just basicly repeating yourself like you did.
I'd also say right one more verse, the song has to much chorus and not enouch verse.
#4
Quote by Twist of fate
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what rule did i break?

i read the rules before i posted
#5
Sorry, Im out of it today. I'll edit in a crit

We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down
This was kind of a dry line but I can see how it relates to the song

It's been 8 damn years of servitude
to the conservative elite
But we're gonna ****ing knock you down
right off your ****ing feet.
****ING FIGHT THE MAN! Nice

we've got a righteous mission
not for money or for profit
but for the peoples rights!
Excellent word choice

We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down


we're gonna take this country back
back to the way it was formed when
Washington, and jefferson
had won
I don't quite feel the washington and jefferson thing

they call you patriots
but they dont know what that word means
cause you don't know what its like
to follow your own dreams
So true

We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down


And now the people will fight back
and take charge of thier lives.
cause we're all tired of being
told what we're fighting for!
Woo yay! Reminds me of 300. This isn't a formal comment but okay.


We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down

We don't fight fair
we're not gonna take take lying down
oh no no we don't fight fair
and we're not gonna take this lying down
Last edited by Twist of fate at Sep 16, 2007,
#6
Quote by HLrocker
eh..decently written, kind of repetive though I'd say keep the first 2 lines in the chorus, and right 2 seperate ones to go with it instead of just basicly repeating yourself like you did.
I'd also say right one more verse, the song has to much chorus and not enouch verse.



yeah i know it is repetative, i think i've just been going for something catchy for people to shout along to with it, which is why i chose that chorus.


and no problem twist of fate, we all have our off-days.
#7
thanks for the crits, guys, i'm not used to writing lyrics as i usually just write riffs and melodies in my band, so i'm continually working on it.