#1
Hey ppl this is my first post on ug. iv never beeen into writing before but had a buzz for it today well half an hour ago. have a read and please feel free to criticize (constructivley) but if it is utter crap also tell me.

Its sitting in the corners of my broken mind
Its swimming in the rivers of my heart
But it don’t know were to go
And hasn’t clue how to start
And its never gonna find you if we are apart

And i just want to say it
And want to sing right out loud
But your never gonna hear my voice
Within the masses of crowd

Its sitting in the corners of my broken mind
Its swimming in the rivers of my heart
But it don’t know were to go
And hasn’t clue how to start
And its never gonna find you if we are apart

Cos this thing i wanna show ya
Has never been shown before
And its only welcome to you
cos its no longer mine its yours
but until then

Its sitting in the corners of my broken mind
Its swimming in the rivers of my heart
But it don’t know were to go
And hasn’t clue how to start
And its never gonna find you if we are apart
All i wanna do is give you my heart.

Thankyou and if you do like it.... its mine
#3
No names but shes amazing, but shes goin uni for three years so hence last line of chorus
#4
It is ok, it is often hard for me to get into love songs because they make me cringe. But with
this song it looks more natural, and heartfelt; you have caputured some nice images and made them stick with good sentance structures.
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