#1
Try'd a fun style of writing...any thought will be aprreciated and 100% likely to be returned...to you it may not all fit...but to me it does.....so try to figure out how the parts fit!!!!!!!


Im on fire,
Still the frost bite stings
I perspire,
Its what the snow fall brings

As I lay freezing in this scorching wasteland,
My mind is teasing and showing me a tuna can
Yum yum tuna sounds super delicious,
EVERYONE KNOWS THAT BANANA'S ARE NUTRITIOUS!

Swim, Swim, Swim
Swim away fast
Cant get anywhere,
Like walking into glass
Run, Run, Run
Run into the hills
Feeling kind of faint
From taking all those pills

As I lay freezing in this scorching wasteland,
My mind is teasing and showing me a tuna can
I dont know where in cold hell it is I am
All I know is I see a tuna can!

Fall, fall, fall
Fall away so fast
Looking into the,
Future not the past
Climb, climb, climb
High up in the sky
And light on fire,
Deep into the night

Im on fire,
Still the frost bite stings,
I perspire
It is what the snowfall brings
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#2
I am little drunk so ignore me . This will sound little childish but Is this about a dog feeling hungry in Arctic??
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#3
hmmm nope but I can see how you see that....lol, but no it is definitely not about a dog feeling hungry in the Arctic, nice try though!
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#4
I dont know where in cold hell it is I am

This line is little awkward . use some periods and punctuation
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