#1
its not quite metal, more like groove metal...

anyways, this is a recent song me and the band have written

i just wanna see what improvements we could make on it..e.g. make it heavier ect.

c4c as usual



(oh and ignore the name)

EDIT: forgot to metion, we havent finished writing the bass part up on gp yet
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Last edited by thecameronator at Sep 19, 2007,
#2
Haha, that's pretty awesome. I thought the solos were pretty fitting, and actually had some rhyme and reason behind them instead of mindless shredding.

I thought the rhythm was good, as well; I'm relieved to hear the bass do something. Only thing I thought that would sound better is in bars 15-18, changing the F5s into F#5s. I reckon the dissonance sounds a little out of place, compared to the F#5.
#3
man, thanks for the good word on the solos too

yer ill take your advice for bars 15-18 too, ill see what we can do
#4
Talk about groove. I especially like 29-36. The intro riff is really good as well. The solo does nothing for me, though. The timing is off and it sounds out of key.
#5
Lol, master of the puppets all over again, that was such a good song, all the rift were well made and placed. i also like your work on the guitar pan with the intro rifts and the fills with the bass guitar (you must have one wicked bassist). the solo were great, they really suited the song and were well made. it seemed to remind me of metallica and devil driver lots.

9/10 (like to see your bands material) great work man

also if u get the time can u crit mine, c4c
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#6
Very nice to see some interesting bass. It seems a bit left out towards the end though.
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#7
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Lol, master of the puppets all over again, that was such a good song, all the rift were well made and placed. i also like your work on the guitar pan with the intro rifts and the fills with the bass guitar (you must have one wicked bassist). the solo were great, they really suited the song and were well made. it seemed to remind me of metallica and devil driver lots.

9/10 (like to see your bands material) great work man

also if u get the time can u crit mine, c4c
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cheers for the crit man

yer, uh the links in arent really working, so yer i havent been able to return the favour
#8
well the intro is lame.

But the riff in bar 33 is cool and i think you should finish the phrase there( like a bar later). It sounds incomplete. the solos are overall lame, but you did have some cool licks in there so theres still hope. Just phrase it better. As for the other riffs, they were kinda lame and not really that groovy.

To be honest as far as groove metal goes, this really isn't too good. Only 1 or 2 riffs in there are good.

C4C right?
#9
Intro's pretty cool. Next riff sucks a slight bit...and wow! The next one is great! Reminds me of MOP. Nice work on the bass there. Next riff is alright..not my favorite. Hah. Next one is a typical little interlude. Could be a bit varied..next one is cool though. I like it. And same with the next little one. Very groovy. Sweet solo. I'm likin' that one too. Great song. 9/10 for me. A few things that could use work, but most of it is great. Crit my newest? Power Metal Song.