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Good
2 67%
Hmmm ... Okay-ish
1 33%
Nah
0 0%
Terrible !
0 0%
Voters: 3.
#1
Heyy,
Umm ...
I'm new Here, and I just Learned Bass
I wondered if I should record some of My songs I wrote.
Could you guys comment, Please ?
I would Love you if you did !

Here's one of The Songs !
I'm pretty Ill right now, so there's nothing else worth writing, is there ?


Lipstick Marks and Broken Hearts only Lead to a blood stained Casket


Standing alone in this confined space,
Feeling alone and swallowed by disgrace,
Fake smiles begin to take control,
Will this razorblade help to bury my soul ?

Shattered hopes and worn-out dreams,
Visions of a Girl who should have been,
Dead Pulse and a Broken Vein,
Another Careless Mistake without a Name.

As Blood Draws Close,
My flesh begins to crawl,
Because to you I mean nothing at all,
Now I’m Bruised and Abused,
So why can’t you see,
I just can't let go of this easily.

As temptation begins to fill my mind,
The relief of the blade begins to grind
Against my wrist a flush of red
Because of you my Heart's went Dead.

Shattered hopes and worn-out dreams,
Visions of a Girl who should have been,
Dead Pulse and a Broken Vein,
Another Careless Mistake without a Name.

As Blood Draws Close,
My flesh begins to crawl,
Because to you I mean nothing at all,
Now I’m Bruised and Abused,
So why can’t you see,
I just can't let go of this easily.

Doubt begins to Seep all about,
As the casket closes and The lights go out,
Mourners watch as I sink further down,
As i make my final appearance in this dreary town


Was It Wise ?
All these Lies ?
Lies that Lead to Misery and Pain,
Don't you feel,
This is all Un-Real,
And Life's Just cruel and sickening Game.

As Blood Draws Close,
My flesh begins to crawl,
Because to you I mean nothing at all,
Now I’m Bruised and Abused,
So why can’t you see,
I just can't let go of this easily.

As Blood Draws Close,
My flesh begins to crawl,
Because to you I mean nothing at all,
Now I’m Bruised and Abused,
So why can’t you see,
I just can't let go of this easily.

Burning Bridges and Gaping Wounds,
Only lead you towards your Doom,
This blade seems to Kill the Pain,
Leaving you feeling so In-Humane,
Turned into the thing you once Despised,
Sick of all The Pain and Lies,

A sharp pain,
A flash of Red,
One quick slash and everyone's dead,
You couldn’t live with all this guilt
So know you lay still beneath your quilt.


As Blood Draws Close,
My flesh begins to crawl,
Because to you I mean nothing at all,
Now I’m Bruised and Abused,
So why can’t you see,
I just can't let go of this easily.


As Blood Draws Close,
My flesh begins to crawl,
Because to you I mean nothing at all,
Now I’m Bruised and Abused,
So why can’t you see,
I just can't let go of this easily.

Now we dwell in hell together,
always as one from now untill forever
#3
i hope you don't slit your wrists...
"I can picture in my mind a world without war, a world without hate. And I can picture us attacking that world, because they'd never expect it."
#4
Haha !
No , I wrote it for My friend.
He died last Month ...
It came as a shock, and the best thing I could think of was to Write a Song.
#6
Oh, I'm sorry to hear that - my condolences. Good lyrics btw. I'm sure your friend would have liked them too.
"I can picture in my mind a world without war, a world without hate. And I can picture us attacking that world, because they'd never expect it."
#8
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Song looks good by the way . delete those extras thread

"reported"
Hi
#9
Quote by One-Last-Kiss_x
Thanks
I have Like 3 songs for Him, but I liked this one the best


Can you please make sure you give the rules a good read, you're breaking quite a few with your few posts. You're only asked once too.

Thanks
THW
Filth, pure filth... That's what you are.