#1
I watched from above the over pass
Hoping to see you as you passed by
How could you do this to me and mother?
You, my flesh and blood, you were my father

But I guess it doesn't matter
In war
Everybody suffers
You sacrifice what means the most
And me and mother we're stuck
Talking to your ghost

5 years later, and mother still paces the hallway
Hoping to see you, standing in her bedroom doorway
I guess that she doesn't really understand that you're gone
Died in a war, for the government for the glory of God

But I guess that doesn't matter,
In war
Everybody suffers
You sacrifice what means the most
And me and mother we're stuck
Talking to your ghost

...me and mother we're stuck
...talking to your ghost
#2
I love the imagery in this.. it automatically takes my mind from a father marching off to war to the mother waiting for him in the hallway. excellent literature, keep up the good work
#3
The first 4 lines are amazing. The "I watched from the over pass...passed by," is an awesome phrase. I'm not sure what literary technique that's called, but it works great. Nice work
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#4
Hey, I recorded a rouch version of the song, just so you could see how they fit to the music. Let me know what you think. I have a cold so I can't sing very well, and for some reason on my laptop when I plug in my mic, it gives me the crappy bubbly feedbacky sound.

www.myspace.com/risingactionrock

Let me know what you think!