#1
EDIT: I added a better transition to the final breakdown.
And a midi file to the folder.
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Last edited by FlyingPooooo at Sep 23, 2007,
#3
It was pretty cool.. I liked the drums.. but the guitars need better riffage..
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#4
drums were pleasing.
guitars were a tad too overdramatic.

i dont know, maybe its just me.

8/10.

keep editing this one, it has great potential.
#5

Not too bad.
Drums were written pretty well, but nothing spectacular really.
Guitar is not too bad but a lot of it seems forced.

Keep working on it.

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#6
that was pretty good, I expect good things from you in the future because you're definatly on the right track.

Though I REALLY don't understand why people feel the need to let us know how many songs they've posted on UG. I listen to them the same way whether you've posted 1 or 100.
#7
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that was pretty good, I expect good things from you in the future because you're definatly on the right track.

Though I REALLY don't understand why people feel the need to let us know how many songs they've posted on UG. I listen to them the same way whether you've posted 1 or 100.

It might not be the second song he's posted.
Maybe it's the second song that he has written, and he's proud of himself?
I was proud when I finished my first, second, third, fourth, and fifth, and every other song

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#8
Thanks for all the comments and suggestions. I am working on more intense riffs, the timing is the issue for me. Slowly its coming to me though. =D

What do you mean by overdramatic?
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#9
its pretty good,
but calm down with your snare drum haha.

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#10
I like my snare.
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#11
Is this seriously your second song? My second song was just a chord progression .
Well, at bar 5, I was expecting an explosion, I just felt it coming. I loved the part starting at 15, great stuff. The breakdown was cool, reminded me of Protest The Hero for some reason.
Wow, I'm expecting great stuff from you now.

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#12
Yep, it sure is. =D I am working on my third right now as I speak. Anyways, measure 15 in probably my favorite part of the song too. It doesn't seem like it but its very tricky to play.

I'll crit in a bit, going to Guitar Center. =D
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#13
I think there were too many tempo changes, the intro was kind of boring. The part after this upto bar 25 seemed kind of repetitive and generic sounding, I don't generally listen to music like this so don't take offense to that. This part was sweet. (Bar 25)Tieing the intro riff back into the song and taking out the other instruments in parts was wicked. The breakdown before the end breakdown was badass(bar 54). 7/10 Good job. I think other people will enjoy this more than me, because this is a genre I prefer.
#14
i like this alot but i do agree with too many tempo changes.
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