#1
Hey guys. I've been scamming the forums for a few months off and on, checking out some of the other members' work, and a lot of it I like. But I figured I'd get some critique on the music for my band's first original "Breathing Is Harder Underwater."

I wouldn't say it's 100%. I'm still working on the verse lead. Also note the drum track - the bass drum and snare are accented. I like to hear em, and if I don't accent them it's hard for me to hear em :P.

anyway, lemme know what you think!


~Cody
Attachments:
breathing..underwater.zip
#2
for anyone who is wondering, it isn't a virus, and it's a Guitar Pro 5 file, haha. As for the song, nice job. Seems like you put a lot of work into this. I could hear this being on the radio hahahaha, good job at making it mainstream. Lyrics yet?
#3
Thanks a lot man! We've all put a lot of thought into it. THIS group has been together about 2 and a half months, after a few member changes and drama, and we've been working on this song for about 3 to 4 weeks ALWAYS finding ways to improve it. We didn't wanna write a half-written song like a lot of bands do, ya know? Especially where I live.. We're now working on the music for our 2nd original (untitled at the moment). We've been working on it for about a week so far. I've already started tabbing it out, so I'll post it whenever I finish it.

and ohh yeah, there are lyrics. I'm not sure if our singer would want me to release em though. The song is pretty much finished.

More criticism appreciated!

~Cody
#4
Wow xD
I really really liked this song.

That was extremely good

If/when you record it I'd love to hear it

There isn't much to crit, it's pretty much perfect.

If you wanna crit one of mine, I'd appreciate it
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=677155

Can't wait for more songs

~Loki <3
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#5
Like the bass poet said, its really well done. not sure what I could crit about it heh.

its catchy, and I can definitely hear this reaching the more mainstream audience (that's not a bad thing at all, if its what you are going for / like to play :p)..

good job with it.. Go record it now! ^^

take a look at mine ? ..link in sig.. it seems like we kinda both got the same intro riff idea :p he he (but the songs develop way different !)
#6
That was sweet, the main riff was catchy and interesting (the let ring one) but i cant help but feel it repeated alot. i know vocals usually sorts out repeatsing, but that repeated a bit part twice. i think maybe a solo someway i the first section before the soft vocals part would really spice it up and keep it fresh. the soft part was a nice change and so was the breakdown, but then it kinda just ended. maybe a small outro riff/lead to fade out would be a nice way to finish.

mind having alook at the bottom one in my sig?

#8
Here are some MIDIs. One of Breathing Is Harder Underwater and one of our 2nd original that I'm working on. I didn't put the tab in with it because it's only like.. 70% finished, if that. There's a lot wrong with it right now, and a lot has been thrown in, but it's coming along! Then there's one more. This is quite old.. I didn't even remember I had it, but I really like it. It has an August Burns Red feel to it. This has a MIDI and a GP5 file.

Enjoy!
Attachments:
Songs.zip
Last edited by Side Project at Sep 25, 2007,