#1
hey people. i told myself that i would never write a sappy love song for a girl. unfortunately, i wrote a sappy love song for a girl. yadda yadda yadda it didnt work out, thanks for the critiques. leave a link and ill try to return the favor.

one more rose, hidden for your eyes.
along side a memory of good times.
with words for you, meant to show how i feel.
i guess that this is my last surprise.

a surprise that is only meant to,
bring out that smile that's not hard to find.
maybe it will be that one thing,
that makes you wonder what this life could be like.

you said, you wish it could be different.
it can be, if that is really what you want.
you said, you wish it could be different.
it can be, if you really want it enough.

when you're with me, i feel it oh so well.
that this could be the greatest love ever found.
but now, you're about to get in that car.
on a journey to find the love you didn't find in this town.

you said, you wish it could be different.
it can be, if that is really what you want.
you said, you wish it could be different.
it can be, if you really want it enough.

one more rose, hidden for your eyes.
along side a memory of good times.
with words for you, meant to show how i feel.
i hope this is not my last surprise.
#2
Theres nothing wrong with a good sappy love song if it gets you some lovin!

This is a good start! A few week points in the first section:
with words for you, meant to show how i feel.- a little bit vague, maybe try and recall a certain memory
this is my last surprise. - try to be a little more direct and cut out the "i guess that". Same with the maybe in the second verse. To me its unecessary, because you know (and she knows) it IS the one thing.

The chorus would sound great if you record a few vocal tracks, for the "it can be" overlapping with the rest, etc. Same idea as my line above, take out the indecisive bits:
said you wish it could be different.
i know its been tough
said you wish it could be different.
do you want it enough?

Third verse is good! I might go with something like this:
when you're with me, these ideas unwind.
and this could be the greatest love i'll ever find
so i'll watch you car until it drives away
on a journey to find the love you left behind.

Remember these are all suggestions, im not trying to re-write your song! So dont get annoyed by any of my changes, you are the creator and therefore do not have to use them! Just giving my quick two bits.